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Thoughts Of A Solder. (another one dies tonight)

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Falling rain
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Twilight is dawning
Cold hanging on my breath
Smoke filling in the air
With the burning smell of death.

Loaded gun
Cold eyes with tears
A war is raging on
What more can we fear?

Bullets flying and cutting the air.
Blood is shed for the bigger man.
What is the reason?
What was the plan?

There's no sense to this.
Unreasonable and cruel
Accusations and hate
grows this fire as fuel.

Another solder fighting in this war.
Doesn't have much to say
Only a pawn in this game
Fighting to live another day.

Ash is falling from the sky
Hearing the innocent cries
Mind whipped clear of all fear
As another soul dies.  

I can't stop bleeding
From this battle wound
My time is running out
It'll all be over soon.  


  
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1 posted 01-03-2009 12:14 AM       View Profile for rhia_5779   Email rhia_5779   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rhia_5779

I loved this especially the second to last stanza so emotional and such beautiful imagery. I really liked it- very well written. Good write
Rhia
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2 posted 01-04-2009 04:17 PM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

Love it!

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this is one of your best, in my opinion. i loved it to every extent, lol. great imagry and flow with the words...library.

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4 posted 01-27-2009 10:21 PM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

Nice details!!! I'm not one for war poems, but this one highly intrigued me. Nice work...You're turning into one of my favorite poets.
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5 posted 01-27-2009 10:32 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

hehehe. Awwww!!! I'm glad you like my work. Your work isn't too bad if I do say so myself. lol. Thanks for all the comments! xD

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know itís not for me, thatís when Iíll miss you.

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i love it! it brings the reality of war into perspective. its really well written and i dont think you could make it any better.
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It is well written, yet only one view of a landscape with endless windows.

I shall post another under a new topic.

Beautifully captured.


-LostPoet
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Thank you for writing this. It was really hard for me to read, because my brother heads of to Afghanistan soon, but it's really beautiful and the wording is... haunting, but amazing.
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9 posted 08-02-2009 10:28 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Aww I'm really sorry. My poem here wasn't a happy one at that. So I bet it probably just builds up the worry for your brother. I have cousins in the war and I know how it feels.

I hope you find comfort and peace at mind. Best of wishes. And thanks for reading.

-Zach
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10 posted 08-02-2009 05:10 PM       View Profile for nehematala   Email nehematala   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nehematala

Thanks for writing this it is hard to read but really good.

You are an amazing poet and are one of my favorites

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