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Twilight - Taken By The Firing Squad

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RevengeIsMine
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0 posted 12-31-2008 09:37 PM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RevengeIsMine

Heya Guys, First Post In A While.. Writing's Got Dodgey.. Was just messing with some words n come up with this.. Thanks Zach for helping me a bit!!

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Twighlight

If you’re out there reading this
On a night that’s fading grey
A life will be taken skilfully
And it will be taken here today

As the day drew to a close
A man began to cry
He sat about the soiled edge
And prayed he didn’t have to die

His message wasn’t one of hope
Nor that one ofjoy
The angel’s didn’t have the words
To help him fill the void

So solemnly he held his head
And fought back the poisoned tears
For twilight had awoken him
He’d been expecting this for years

You see he wasn’t needed here
Bought more harm than good
Took the lives of innocents
And any children that he could

The angels stood for one last time
As the blood washed down the shore
Another life just gone to waste
Another memory to mourn

And in a grave they made themselves
They laid that man to rest
Propped up by a leaf or two
They laid the bullet on his chest

But printed on the headstone
In words faded black
“Taken by the firing squad”
He aint never coming back..

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rhia_5779
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1 posted 01-01-2009 09:16 PM       View Profile for rhia_5779   Email rhia_5779   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rhia_5779

Wow this is really powerful! I love this - its really sad but theres such an eloquence about it and such a matter a fact way in which its said\worded. What inspired this if anything?Glad to see you back!
Rhia
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2 posted 01-02-2009 04:13 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Like I said before Jess. This is a great poem. But personally it wasn't my favorite. Glad to be of any help in this masterpiece..

-Zach
RevengeIsMine
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3 posted 01-03-2009 07:04 AM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RevengeIsMine

Thanks Guys,

Um Well to be honest rhia i was mucking around with words then i saw some doco on the bali terrorst that just recently got executed.. and thats how it turned out :P
GothicCherry
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4 posted 03-20-2009 08:59 AM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

'The angels stood for one last time
As the blood washed down the shore
Another life just gone to waste
Another memory to mourn'

I liked this stanza best but they were all good
 
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