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Dishari Chakraborty
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since 06-01-2015
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Kolkata, India


0 posted 06-01-2015 01:42 AM       View Profile for Dishari Chakraborty   Email Dishari Chakraborty   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dishari Chakraborty

It trudged along the watery slope,
So confident and gay
I stared at it with a soothing smile
Not knowing that it may get strayed
The heavens have been drizzling for long
The sweet sway makes me forlorn
The streams of water trickling down-
Creating hurdles in its lane
Still it trudged so confidently,
Towards the glass-
Which once satisfied my belly
The intricate designs and charming lily
Are now killing me, so cruelly
I raised my hand to stop it from-
Going near-
As the glass was strong
And I knew it better than all
Now experiencing its strength
The world now seems so pale to me.
And I tried to distract it
But all my efforts were in vain
And I got a company again
The friends who were once so good
I never knew, they would make me fool
Those paper notes, which I threw-
Into the darkness of life and death.

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Margherita
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since 02-08-2003
Posts 21846
Eternity


1 posted 06-01-2015 05:31 PM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

Welcome to Passions in Poetry, dear Dishari!

You choose Dark Poetry to post your first offering and indeed your poem is very sad. It is very well written. I have read it three times, it is intriguing and yet "it" remains a little cryptic. Regarding your thoughts about "friends" it is a very painful experience when we discover that they are not sincere.

Looking forward to read more of you.

Margherita
devina
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since 10-28-1999
Posts 3515
Too Far North, Cali


2 posted 06-06-2015 02:51 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Great dark verse, well played!

"The streams of water trickling down-
Creating hurdles in its lane"

~Astounding power here! I can see a tender rain drop, slidin' slowly down the pane/(pain) of window glass. Excellent image!

Warm Welcome, DC!
~d


"..But a tyrant spell has bound me,
And I cannot, cannot go.."
~Emily Bronte
'The Night is Darkening Around Me'

[This message has been edited by devina (06-08-2015 02:34 PM).]

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