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Dishari Chakraborty
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Kolkata, India

0 posted 2015-06-01 01:42 AM


It trudged along the watery slope,
So confident and gay
I stared at it with a soothing smile
Not knowing that it may get strayed
The heavens have been drizzling for long
The sweet sway makes me forlorn
The streams of water trickling down-
Creating hurdles in its lane
Still it trudged so confidently,
Towards the glass-
Which once satisfied my belly
The intricate designs and charming lily
Are now killing me, so cruelly
I raised my hand to stop it from-
Going near-
As the glass was strong
And I knew it better than all
Now experiencing its strength
The world now seems so pale to me.
And I tried to distract it
But all my efforts were in vain
And I got a company again
The friends who were once so good
I never knew, they would make me fool
Those paper notes, which I threw-
Into the darkness of life and death.


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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2015-06-01 05:31 PM


Welcome to Passions in Poetry, dear Dishari!

You choose Dark Poetry to post your first offering and indeed your poem is very sad. It is very well written. I have read it three times, it is intriguing and yet "it" remains a little cryptic. Regarding your thoughts about "friends" it is a very painful experience when we discover that they are not sincere.

Looking forward to read more of you.

Margherita

devina
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
Cali
2 posted 2015-06-06 02:51 PM


Great dark verse, well played!

"The streams of water trickling down-
Creating hurdles in its lane"

~Astounding power here! I can see a tender rain drop, slidin' slowly down the pane/(pain) of window glass. Excellent image!

Warm Welcome, DC!
~d


"..But a tyrant spell has bound me,
And I cannot, cannot go.."
~Emily Bronte
'The Night is Darkening Around Me'

[This message has been edited by devina (06-08-2015 02:34 PM).]

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