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Walter Poe
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 787


0 posted 2013-11-13 06:15 PM


I came here because noone will see
It is only for those who do not know me
Or will not have any resonance to my words

I am alone

I created this reality
through my own decisions
each right in its own way

So I fear

My life collapses
I have little remaining
Fake hope from a empty source

I am unwanted

It is as it should be
I am less than I was
much less than I could have been

I am a faint outline

An unfilled void
emptied of life unfulfilled
incapable of joy of fun friendless

I am the unwanted

I am who I chose to be
Unloved, incapable of love
I am reviled and rightfully so

I am dead inside

I am the snow, the earth
I am beauty and I sleep
the final sleep under the stars

Outside of a dog, a book is a man's best friend. Inside of a dog it's too dark to read.

© Copyright 2013 Paul Weatherstone - All Rights Reserved
River
Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world
1 posted 2014-01-04 03:35 AM


"I am a faint outline"  

i really like this line!

Bluesy Socrateaser
Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417
In The Mirror
2 posted 2014-02-19 11:18 AM


An extraordinary amount of depth in your writing. Whether real or imagined from the pen's perspective, the human drama within your work is strikingly real.

The last few lines seem to soften the blow somewhat, but all that moves toward the end is quite powerful.

...just bein' Bluesy

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