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LaGraceLa
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since 2011-01-30
Posts 243
Minnesota, USA

0 posted 2012-09-02 11:07 PM





I'm not sure what possessed me.
I watch the body move in the glowing ashes
and feel sick to my stomach.
All my life I have built and lit fires.
And all my life I have caught and cared for animals.

So I'm not sure what possessed me today
to put the crawfish I pulled
so carefully out of the water
into the fire.

I guess I was finally too sick
of being the only one
burning alive.

Only it didn't help.
Not at all.
In fact I feel even worse--
as I watch it's legs burn off and shell crack,
tail snapping against it's burnt little body
in attempt to repel itself away
from the flames--
I feel even worse
because I know exactly how that feels.
And I brought that pain
upon an innocent creature.

Just like He did 
to me.

And as the body stops fighting
I begin to cry,
something I have not done
in a very long time.

I cry,
but wiether it is for the crawfish
or me
I don't want to think about.

Either way
I'm afraid of the answer.
So instead I think I will just wonder
about what possessed me to do this
and cry.


  

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r v wooo
Senior Member
since 2007-08-07
Posts 656

1 posted 2012-09-03 11:21 AM


Humm, La.....La,
One's perception is one's reality.
Try removing yourself from the loneliest number. The drama is too self-centered.
Pyromania and sadism require more research.
I boiled a lobster...then ate it! Was the situation a sadistic endeavor on my part? I didn't think so...and still don't! No big deal! 'cause that is my perception.
In my belief system, the reality is..."matter is neither created or destroyed; it just changes forms" and what was a lobster is now a part of me.
Try understanding self...the idioverse of a creative writer is an intriguing domain...and technique, or technic, can be an important culinary device.
I suggest boiling water next time and try making a meal of what you have prepared.
Waste not! Want not!
I'm "passing" this one back...no grade!
Follow the suggestions and make appropriate modifications.

...think! and good-will, hunting...

[This message has been edited by r v wooo (09-03-2012 12:54 PM).]

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