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Dark Poetry #5

Self-inflicted Blindness

LaGraceLa
Member

since 2011-01-30

Posts 243
Minnesota, USA

0 posted 2012-06-19 04:53 PM

I see your raised, balled up fist
but decide not to care.
So when it inevitably smashes into my body
I pretend the damage isn't there.

arofriend
New Member

since 2012-06-07

Posts 9

1 posted 2012-07-02 07:34 PM

This is very frank and numb, which seems appropriate. The rhyming isn't terribly intrusive and the poem is short and matter of fact. A good shocker.

LaGraceLa
Member

since 2011-01-30

Posts 243
Minnesota, USA

2 posted 2012-07-03 11:17 AM

Thank you! I am happy it came across as numb and emotionless, it was really confusing trying to write like that

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