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chylenedoney
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since 2010-10-14
Posts 27
Idaho, USA

0 posted 2011-06-28 08:32 PM


Summer winds have blown away

A solitary wolf's lonely cries

Wishing the wind would come again

To dry his teary eyes

The time ticks by around a clock

The sun is less every day

Inside the trees know to there cores

That Autumn is on the way

The nights get colder with each moonrise

And confirm all of their fears

So they shed all the covers

And sudder as their leaves fall like multicolored tears.


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ponderthepoetorrsx
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since 2011-06-25
Posts 284
U.S , Ca
1 posted 2011-06-30 09:49 PM


hmmmm makes me thoughtfull
XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435
Antarctica
2 posted 2011-07-09 11:57 AM


This makes me happy, happy that you wrote it. There is everything good to say and nothing lacking. It's on track, crammed with meaning, and as the above reader spoke, creates an attitude of thoughtfulness and reflection in the most beautifully imaginable way. And while more than one verse or set stood out to me, this one spoke first in it's exquisitely purposeful time loop which recaptured, and then renewed the use of an excellently artistic element-

"Summer winds have blown away

A solitary wolf's lonely cries

Wishing the wind would come again

To dry his teary eyes"

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·
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