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maddorani
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since 2007-11-18
Posts 423
houston,tx

0 posted 2011-05-09 07:36 PM


ok this is not a suicidal poem its just my thoughts and feelings and also i think some of it might be choppy but i would still love some feedback thanks
What would happen if I disappear?
What would happen if I wasn’t here?
Will there be actually someone who cares?
Will there be?
Sometimes I wish I would disappear
Sometimes I wish I wasn’t here
Sometimes I wish to be taken away
Because I don’t want to be here
I just don’t!
And no one will understand why
They will only watch and stand by
No one will apprehend this guilt
That I have kept inside
To them it seems like
I have committed a crime
What kind of crime did I commit?
What kind of crime was it?
Was that crime that bad?
That it left me as an outcast!
What did I do to deserve this?
What did I do?
What would happen if I disappear?
What would happen I wasn’t here?
Probably people will be happy
Probably they won’t even care
Probably they won’t even notice
What would happen If I disappear?
What would happen?
People don’t even know me
And yet they dare to say
Bad rumors about me
What did I ever do to them?
I only made one mistake
And this is how it turns out
What’s the point of
Me being here
Since the whole world
Is against me
I pray to god everyday
Asking for mercy and to help me
But he is the only one
That I can turn up to
He is the only one that I can count on
When the whole world
Is against me
I wonder if there is someone
That can hear my sorrowful cries
I wonder if god
Can hear my sorrowful cries
If he does
Then he should
Send someone
To be by my side



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LaGraceLa
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since 2011-01-30
Posts 243
Minnesota, USA
1 posted 2011-05-09 08:46 PM


I've felt this way so many times. It is a cruel game because you have to get to this point in order to find that one person who was always there, but you never bothered to notice. Good poem, a lot of feelings and passion. The only suggestion is that after a while it became somewhat repetitive, but other than that fabulous job!
maddorani
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since 2007-11-18
Posts 423
houston,tx
2 posted 2011-05-09 09:55 PM


thank u
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