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maddorani
Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423
houston,tx

0 posted 2011-04-26 04:40 PM


i am not new here but this is my first post in dark poetry i hope you all enjoy it

I am becoming  
Pallid, lurid and
Frail because my heart
Has been gouged out and
My blood is oozing  
Out of the hole making
A crimson river
Of blood that keeps on
Flowing and glistening
I am here just lying
Down and being drenched in
My own blood because
I can’t move, crawl,
Walk or sit I only
Can remorsefully watch
My blood oozing out of  
The hole and think about
My hideous memories
And how it felt when
People trampled over
My feelings and made it
Into a wounded heart
But then reality
Strikes me when I smell
The stench of my own
Blood making me
Suffocate making my
Eyes burn and slowly they
Are closing away
Giving me a hint that
My own death is
Approaching me yet
I desire to be saved
And be free but I can’t
Because I can’t walk
Or move around and
Yet I still wish for
Someone to come but
No one would come and if
A person does come then
I would be gone by
Then and I will be
Perished and that person
Would see is my skeleton
With my heart missing

© Copyright 2011 madiha - All Rights Reserved
LaGraceLa
Member
since 2011-01-30
Posts 243
Minnesota, USA
1 posted 2011-04-26 08:26 PM


Wow, that is emotional. I am interested by the line breaks, they seem to have no reason but they some how make it seem broken and bleeding, just like the heart. Very good words yet I think the set up could be better, but all in all I love it.
maddorani
Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423
houston,tx
2 posted 2011-04-26 10:14 PM


thank you i really appreciate it
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