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Dark Poetry #5

hidden emotion

LaGraceLa
Member

since 2011-01-30

Posts 243
Minnesota, USA

0 posted 2011-02-07 08:06 AM

I'm good,
I'll admit.
You'd never know.
But I do.
I give signs,
not big,
but there.
I promise,
look, and you
could see.
My eyes,
they're blank.
But tears,
they do,
they well up.
And I swear,
if you looked,
you could see
the pain,
the misery,
the agony
inside of me.

HopelessRomantic101
Junior Member

since 2011-02-09

Posts 10
Georgia, United States of America

1 posted 2011-02-09 07:14 PM

I'm not a fan of the line interruptions, but I suppose they do get the message across effectively. It's not the best thing I've ever read, but it is by far not the worst. Keep at it!

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

2 posted 2011-03-24 05:08 PM

I'm a fan of anything that rocks my heart and soul.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

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