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jcata003
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since 2010-08-28
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0 posted 2010-08-28 03:15 AM


A vice
Is the incessant need
Of wanting
Or the continuous and habitual use
Of narcotic substances
It is a word
That defines itself
A word
That captures its ugly image
A word, that if smeared onto a blank canvass
Would envelop it in emptiness
It is the result of natural flaws
Of humanity
Of societies dead-beats
Of opiate addicts, users, abusers
The verbal definition of the mentally encaged
Yet it is a word that plagues any caliber of mind
Non-discriminate of wealth or intellect
It is a word
That whispers cryptic words of assurance
Into the ears of injection needle wielders
Who lull themselves into a chemically induced sleep
It is this word
That hides the rings of men
Slipped casually into a back pocket
In numerous bars
It is ever present
In the rooms of every brothel
Of every back alley
Of every underground red light district
Pervading the mixed smells of cheap cologne and perfume
As well as the lustrous cries of pleasure
Above all
It is a word embedded
Into the minds of the human psyche
Of the individuals
Who are dictated by compulsion
Collapsed, shattered
The inevitable result of
Vice.

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Novus_Os
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since 2010-07-21
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1 posted 2010-08-29 07:01 AM


That was great, with lots of insight.
Thanks.

Regards,

Novus_Os

easy1
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2 posted 2010-08-29 09:12 PM


There are many vices, and many levels of sinning.
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3 posted 2010-08-29 10:25 PM


Welcome to Passions first off   This is a wonderful intro poem.  There are like your second commenter said, so many vices, and not only do they bring down the person possessing them, but everyone they are in contact with.  I wish it was not such a weakness.  I also wish that the people that provide them means for most vices to continue were all behind bars.

Great job on this.

easy1
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4 posted 2010-08-30 08:44 AM


Imho the worst vices involve deliberate unjust harm to others. Those are the sorts of behavior that, as John Stuart Mill remarked, society as a whole has a real warrant to suppress.

Such "mortal" vices include murder, attempted murder, terrorism and terroristic threatening, product tampering and criminal poisoning, unjust torture of any sort (not including spanking, thank you Dr. Spock!), fraud and theft whether isolated or massive in scope, destructive vandalism, deliberate and very cynical miseducation (especially of children), criminal conspiracy and corruption of government, felonious stalking, and all such similar crimes.

As for the rest, permit me to quote folk singer Gordon Lightfoot: "Be calm in the face of all common disgraces, and know what they're doing it for."

Welcome to Piptalk, jcata003!

easy1
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5 posted 2010-08-30 10:14 AM


My apologies for being so verbose, but to the above listing should be added rape---as mortal a sin and ugly a vice as ever there was.
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