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brian thomas madden
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Ireland (between an ocean and a rock)

0 posted 2010-07-08 02:37 AM


I rode a black swan from the cold dark north,
across a lifeless Atlantic stream.
I touched down on your shore,
less than half the man  from your memories.
Of your grand day dreams I could not compete
as I fell from my feet, crushed beneath the weight
of expectations and emotions I could not yet conjure.

Ten years rebuild and torn asunder,
in an ever ending cycle.
We collapsed from the to and fro,
exhausted and unsure of footing
I would reach to touch and hesitate
for fear my hand was pushed away.

Is this a love my heart can not house?
Is this dream too potent to be real?

Now the waves crash against our shores,
whipping my back; taken the brunt to protect yours.
Black waters reach for me and I have no choice but to comply.
There in the depths I am lost, dragged beneath your undertow.
Waves of salted tears strangle my lungs and silence screams.
As I sink I wonder if I were to drown in you
would my last breath be a sacrifice worthy of your grace?

[This message has been edited by brian thomas madden (07-09-2010 07:24 AM).]

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1 posted 2010-07-08 08:09 AM


Welcome home, Brian.

You know what to look for...



" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

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2 posted 2010-07-08 05:19 PM


  Awesome Brian.
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3 posted 2010-07-09 07:18 AM


the horizon,

a thin penciled line
scratched onto a blank screen

or the ink from a quill plucked
from pillow seams...

a monochrome dream

easily erased...replaced

by reality.

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sink sink deep deep in the waves you say you drown for me and all i do is sleep sleep in the lullaby of what was meant to be and i send you home to drown alone and i wait for you to say that when you fell for me the briney deep was shallow to the tears we've weeped but you'll be home someday when the sun dries your salted eyes and you again can see my real beauty was always worth...your defeat.

brian thomas madden
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Ireland (between an ocean and a rock)
4 posted 2010-07-09 07:31 AM


Dreams not replaced but informed by reality,
though it may burn and destroy what we once hoped and believed in, from the ashes is created possibilities anew.
To evolve, to grow to be complete for myself and for you.
These tears this misery in which I drown
I must now own and over come, or miss the chance to bathe in bliss with you.  You keep me afloat and give me oxygen when I have run low.
Though I have been blind to os much to friendship and love your beauty has always shone through.

[This message has been edited by brian thomas madden (07-10-2010 12:40 AM).]

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5 posted 2010-07-09 11:58 AM


Now the waves crash against our shores,
whipping my back; taken the brunt to protect yours.



^^^ This has the ring of atonement to it.

brian thomas madden
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Ireland (between an ocean and a rock)
6 posted 2010-07-12 06:13 PM


Sunshine & Mysteria thank you....

Dawn, you have no idea how much I missed your poetry.

Easy1, thanks for the reply.

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7 posted 2010-10-08 12:47 PM


Awesome indeed.

There are places in the heart that do not yet exist; suffering has to enter in for them to come to be - LeonBloy

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8 posted 2010-12-08 01:02 PM


i really like this poem
i could picture everything happening in my head

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9 posted 2012-08-10 02:04 AM


oh my goodness, how could i not have remembered seeing this?! its right there, my comments! ugghhhh! i think it was pure habit to use your old name to search for your writing...i wont forget this time!
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10 posted 2012-10-12 07:07 PM


nice writing
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11 posted 2014-06-11 06:38 PM


Love the metaphor and I am finding so much here today that fits my present life....thanks for sharing!
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12 posted 2020-05-25 08:32 AM


There are savage images here. I can feel every blow. I love it all. This reminds me that we should only try to live up to expectations if the things people want are a part of us to begin with.

It's good to read your work again even if you're not active. Your eloquence always pulled at my insides.  


"Maybe that's the way I should go
Straight into the mouth of the unknown"

Shinedown

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