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HippinTrippy
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0 posted 2010-03-26 03:01 PM



I grab this pen and paper,
In attempts to gather thoughts.
I soon begin to realise,
There is no clarity to be sought.

Trying to stay positive,
To descipher lessons learned.
Trying just to make it by,
The bridges that we've burned.

There is no more hope to be had,
No more tears to shed.
No one to share this journey with now,
This path alone I tread.

It's not easy being evil, in a world gone to hell.

© Copyright 2010 Joshua Griffin - All Rights Reserved
Falling rain
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1 posted 2010-03-26 03:07 PM


Really like this one. The last stanza was really good. Keep it up!

-Zach

Wish I could find love.. But all I find these days are superficial fish in shallow waters.

HippinTrippy
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2 posted 2010-03-26 07:35 PM


Thank you kindly Zach. I have one more like this I have written recently. As I have been trying for several months now to try and get over my ex.. I honestly hope after tomarrow I won't be posting any more like this.
However I did write a more.. positive poem today, that I will be sharing with you's tomarrow.  Thanks again for the kind words and inspiration.


It's not easy being evil, in a world gone to hell.

Falling rain
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3 posted 2010-03-29 02:44 PM


Not a problem! I'd love to read more of your work.

-Zach

Wish I could find love.. But all I find these days are superficial fish in shallow waters.

HippinTrippy
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4 posted 2010-03-29 06:36 PM


add me to your private library, or just search my name. I posted two more since this. Trying to find the inspiration to sit down and write some more.

It's not easy being evil, in a world gone to hell.

Angel4aKing
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5 posted 2011-02-14 01:56 PM


Too bad you haven't posted more I think U R an awesome poet!!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

HippinTrippy
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6 posted 2011-02-14 10:02 PM


Thank you very kindly Angel4aKing! I've been preocupied. You guys will be the first to know when I can post something a little more positive again.

It's not easy being evil, in a world gone to hell.

LaGraceLa
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7 posted 2011-02-27 09:44 PM


I know exactly what you meen when you write
"I grab this pen and paper,
In attempts to gather thoughts.
I soon begin to realise,
There is no clarity to be sought."
That happens to me all to often. You get a great idea but as soon as you think for words, it is gone and no longer makes sence. You did a great job describing that and I enjoyed this poem quite a bit, wonderful job

HippinTrippy
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8 posted 2011-02-28 10:55 AM


Thank you LaGraceLa. This is another one that flowed through me rather quickly.. Although it took a bit of thinking to start it.. That Stanza actualy meant a few things..

~ I was also hoping that I would feel a little better putting my thoughts onto paper, maybe figure out what exactly I was going through or what I should do.

~But I was ( and am still )far to caught up in this girl ( my best friend/ex and often who I am writing about ) to feel any better, I wish I added onto this poem it is one of my favorites.

~Thank you for your kind words =)

It's not easy being evil, in a world gone to hell.

XGarapanX
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9 posted 2011-03-24 04:59 PM


What they said, plus I love the ???(subtle playfulness?)??? of this piece (not sure what to call what it is I'm seeing here).

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

HippinTrippy
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10 posted 2011-03-24 07:53 PM


Much abliged Garapan! I think I know what you're trying to say. Have you read any of my other poetry? I have a feeling you may get the same feeling from some of those.

I think it just might be how I write :P

Thanks again!

It's not easy being evil, in a world gone to hell.

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