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ateague38
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since 2010-03-25
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0 posted 2010-03-25 03:50 PM



why are you laughing...whats so funny?
and what are you holding...why is it bloody?
why do i feel so suddenly strange...so drained of life and full of rage.
thats my heart...is it not? in it my soul is most certainly caught.
was stealing it a worthy task?...i would've given it if only you'd asked.


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1 posted 2010-03-29 02:47 PM


I think we've all had our heart (soul?) taken from us every now and then. You expressed the feelings wonderfully.

-Zach

Wish I could find love.. But all I find these days are superficial fish in shallow waters.

ateague38
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2 posted 2010-03-29 09:29 PM


hey thanks man. i've read a few of yours and i've thoroughly enjoyed all of them.
LaGraceLa
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since 2011-01-30
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Minnesota, USA
3 posted 2011-02-14 05:39 PM


I know that feeling all too well and it is a relief to have words to it, and your beautiful words at that. Thank you, I love it.
HippinTrippy
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since 2010-03-26
Posts 103
New York
4 posted 2011-03-22 03:27 PM


Thanks for sharing Ateague, I really enjoyed this.

It's not easy being evil, in a world gone to hell.

XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19
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Antarctica
5 posted 2011-03-25 08:40 AM


For myself, I am a great fan of short, meaningful and impactful poems. Well done.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

Haf_Alive
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since 2011-09-04
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High in the Sky
6 posted 2011-09-05 01:10 PM


i think that's why they steal hearts, because they don't intend on returning them whole.
ponderthepoetorrsx
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since 2011-06-25
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7 posted 2011-09-05 05:25 PM


very satisfied after reading this poem great job
rachel_anubis
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since 2011-03-24
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8 posted 2011-09-08 01:49 AM


Short and not very sweet, but very true. You captured feeling in little time. Well done.
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