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0 posted 2010-03-14 10:11 PM



So they were
Curious beings they are
Stalking me with their smile
Bone are their wings; flapping
Croaking a laughter grim

For whats your purpose demon bird?
And with your murder flock
How are you still there when I blink?
Is the smoke form in your eyes poisonous perhaps?
For what is it you laugh at?

I see you in the tree's
I feel you in the air
But what is it demon bird
That fills me with despair?
For you hobble close

Yet keep a distance
What is it you fear?
D e m o n - B i r d ?

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Just another hallucination I had. They still follow me around.

(For those who can't visualize these demons, they look like bird skeletons that fly and move like birds. Yet they have a bit of smoke coming out of their eyes. They fly in murders of 6-8. I don't count 'em really. But its more then 5.)



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1 posted 2010-03-14 11:11 PM


"And with your murder flock"

A line worthy of Poe.

An intriguing read--I thank you.

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2 posted 2010-03-15 05:09 PM


I had a feeling that Poe would be thought when reading my poem. Haha. Thanks for reading!

-Zach

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3 posted 2010-03-15 05:44 PM


I didn't say this before, but the way I visualize them they remind me of the bird things off of Harry Potter. You know, the ones that Luna is always feeding and petting.
Anyway, I like the way that you arranged your words. Great write.
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4 posted 2010-03-16 11:53 AM


Haha you mean the Thresals? The horse-bat things? :P But yeah they kinda look like that but without skin. Thanks for the comment^^

Wish I could find love.. But all I find these days are superficial fish in shallow waters.

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5 posted 2010-03-16 05:31 PM


Yeah! those things. I couldn't remember what they were called.
and you're welcome.


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6 posted 2010-04-16 05:52 PM


always a treat to read your poetry thanks for sharing!
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7 posted 2010-04-26 10:59 AM


Demon birds are so interesting
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8 posted 2010-04-26 05:20 PM


I actually have a recurring dream so similar to this poem Zach.  After reading this - guess what I will be dreaming about tonight.
Well done!

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9 posted 2010-04-27 06:37 PM


Wolf: Thanks you for the high compliment.

Trap: And thanks for liking the topic. But I question if you liked my poem.

Mysteria: Lol. Don't be dreaming of them! They aren't very pleasant to see. But thanks for reading.

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