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Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

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Small town, Illinois

0 posted 2010-01-08 05:26 PM

Don't mind the scratches
That run down my porcelain frame
Our vanity is as thin as glass
We're shiny like window panes

Don't mind the markings
The grooves my tears form
No matter how broken I feel
I show flawless and reform

Don't mind the sorrow
For it won't be there tonight
It'll be held tight under lace
Tied away in bows; out of sight

We'll drink our midnight tea
Another gulp to forget my woes
I won't mind the words
That are thrown by loving foes

Don't mind me when I break
For I can't hold my frame
Its just another move
In this simple game

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

1 posted 2010-01-08 07:44 PM

It's awfully easy to think that way isn't it? To say that you're fine and give someone a smile when you think they might suspect you're unhappy.

great write

{~~*~~}

EmilyTheStrange
{~~*~~}
I have a pet unicorn...his name is Flavius, as in Flavius Belby. Flavius does not like gumballs..

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2010-01-08 09:00 PM

Vanity or fear? We hide away so much, and it is so much easier to tell, share, or discuss it with close family and friends. Took me a lifetime to figure that out.

Good write Zach.

LivingConfused
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since 2009-12-27

Posts 40

3 posted 2010-01-09 06:46 AM

Sir, I don't believe I have commented on your work.  I have read a few of them and find them all touching and clear.  You stir my emotions.  Your work seems to be from an old soul.  No critiques just what i felt.
Don't mind the sorrow
For it won't be there tonight(I have always let the sorrow out at night and held it in the day)

We'll drink our midnight tea
  (midnight tea, I will have to think on that)

I won't mind the words
That are thrown by loving foes
(These two lines strike me dead center)

Its just another move
In this simple game  (excellent ending)

Again, Thank you. LC

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

4 posted 2010-01-10 04:21 PM

Well I don't know if 16 being an old soul. But yes I do believe that I'm more mature then others. hehe. Thank you for your comment

Like I really mean it cause I really liked how you actually talked and not just put "good write." But once again thank you. :]

Em's and Mysteria thanks for your comments. :]

rockbabe
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since 2006-01-29

Posts 105

5 posted 2010-01-12 08:23 AM

I have not been on PIP for a while, and today when browsing through the poems.. yours captured me the most. 16? You writing is that of a much more mature person. Yes, take it as a compliment.

Thanks R

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

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Small town, Illinois

6 posted 2010-01-29 03:44 PM

hehe thanks for the comment.

MorningStar
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since 2009-10-26

Posts 290
Pittsburgh, Pa

7 posted 2010-02-21 08:24 PM

Midnight tea... Love it. Smiling to myself as I finish up a little retail therapy - a little upkeep for my shiny veneer

If I don't say it...who will?

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

8 posted 2010-03-04 05:16 AM

I agree that people often smile and pretend that nothing is wrong when they have been hurt. Perhaps it maybe age or wisdom but a certain amount of cynicism resides within me. I know that people will hurt me and I will inadvertently hurt them. But isn`t that part of being human? A phoney smile doesn`t seem as bad as an all out argument to me. --- A good piece that generates discussion.

JenniferMaxwell

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since 2006-09-14

Posts 2423

9 posted 2010-03-04 01:15 PM

You're really blossoming as a poet, Zach. Another fine write from your gifted pen.

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

10 posted 2010-03-05 09:42 AM

Earl, I can understand what you mean. I think its when someone gain knowledge and can comprehend those feelings do they turn bitter. Its not a matter of age or experience. Its just basic comprehending. Thanks for the thought.

Jen, Thanks! I don't think I'm really growing as a poet. I just learn to show my emotions in a way that seems poetic.

if that makes sense. But I think that's the definition of a "poet." But thanks for the comment!

DizzyLizzy
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since 2010-03-08

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south africa

11 posted 2010-03-08 09:23 AM

that was awesome could really relate keep up the good work!!!

Lizz

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

12 posted 2010-03-11 12:09 PM

thanks Liz!

Wish I could find love.. But all I find these days are superficial fish in shallow waters.

voice2bheard
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since 2007-10-19

Posts 591
New York

13 posted 2010-06-10 01:31 AM

wow very beautiful!! must say!! very great write!!

Kate

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since 2010-06-15

Posts 177
Alabama

14 posted 2010-06-16 10:23 AM

You touched a chord within me. I know that feeling of saying "I'm fine" when you want to scream "I hurt", but feel that you have to keep up the front, don't want to rock the boat (or anyone's feelings).

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

15 posted 2010-10-08 01:12 AM

I haven't been on here for a while, but i'm glad I found this. Fake smiles, fake laughter.....I know this all too well - for some reason "crying is for the weak" was imprinted in my mind haha so I take it all and smile. Nice to know it isn't just me. Thanx for sharing your wonderful piece.

-Trina

There are places in the heart that do not yet exist; suffering has to enter in for them to come to be - LeonBloy

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

16 posted 2010-10-28 01:17 PM

Thank you for reading. Glad that someone was at least to connect with my poetry.

LaGraceLa
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since 2011-01-30

Posts 243
Minnesota, USA

17 posted 2011-04-18 09:55 PM

I have read this six times over, and still can not get enough. I'm not completely sure what it is yet some poems, certain words, they fit. And this poem... I am honored to be able to read it. There is something about your words that are what I- need? I have tried many times to describe this feeling, and each time I think I am doing nothing but proving my insanity. I also happen to be 16, and am also called an old soul. I still have yet to figure out what it means. But I do know that this poem is stunning. I know that feeling all too well, holding it in for them when they should be the ones helping you. Yet you sit there and smile until they leave and then you just break down. I am absolutely amazed by your words, thank you so much for posting them.

Haf_Alive
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since 2011-09-04

Posts 56
High in the Sky

18 posted 2011-09-04 09:41 PM

this poem makes me think a lot... mainly about why we always play these facades. i used to think that it was for the benefit of others that i did this, but maybe it's a defense mechanism of our own... thanks

HAF

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

19 posted 2011-09-11 05:08 PM

Grace, thank you for reading. I'm now 18. (I obviously don't come on this site very much. lol.) Now that I look back at this poem, I see where I was at in my life. Honestly, I just write out whatever sounds good to me. I write some pretty abstract poetry so not everyone can understand what I'm trying to say. Good thing you could understand. Thank you for your comment.

Haf_Alive, That's what I was trying to get at. I know the feeling all too well to act in order for others to leave me alone. I just found that hiding my pain only left me in more pain later on. Thank you for reading.

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