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MorningStar
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0 posted 2009-10-27 06:42 PM



When soft hearts are hardened by callous hands
When crying eyes are dried by coarse linens that are sown together with rough words
When new and tender dreams are shredded by careless, aimless anger
When lying tongues cause gaping wounds in young spirits
And when words spoken in misguided contempt blister innocent skin

Then in the end
The one you see before you is all that is left.
And who are you to object?

When fathers leave
and brothers turn away
When mothers cry
and daughters die inside

Then in the end
Who you see before you is all that remains.

In the years to come
If to you
I am aloof
Or I am cold and uncaring
and if my eyes spill fire instead of tears

Then who are you to object?
After all
It was you who made me thus


If I don't say it...who will?

[This message has been edited by MorningStar (10-28-2009 01:18 PM).]

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1 posted 2009-10-28 02:07 AM


I understand this one very well.

A

MorningStar
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2 posted 2009-10-28 11:12 PM


Alison, thank you for reading me.  I can't tell you how many times I said this to myself...
s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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3 posted 2009-10-31 08:44 PM


In the years to come
If to you
I am aloof
Or I am cold and uncaring
and if my eyes spill fire instead of tears

Then who are you to object?
After all
It was you who made me thus

Powerful Write! I Loved It

There are places in the heart that do not yet exist; suffering has to enter in for them to come to be - LeonBloy

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4 posted 2009-11-04 04:36 PM


I agree with the person above me.
That one part i truly amazing, I understand it well.
Nice Write>.

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5 posted 2009-11-07 07:36 AM


Whoa.. this is really really good. Its been a while since I've read a good poem.

-Zach

MorningStar
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6 posted 2009-11-07 11:18 PM


S1nfully & Desirer - thank you both for reading (and understanding) me.

Zach - you can't see it but, I'm blushing.  Thank you.

If I don't say it...who will?

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