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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

0 posted 2009-10-02 12:06 PM


I pity you
for envying me
this isn't what you want
think twice Sweetie
don't ask me to break you
cause there is no turning back
you'll become numb - cold
emotions and a heart is what you'll lack
you'll be untouchable
once I'm through
even I won't matter
maybe not even you
you'll live in the moment
have all kinds of fun
but at the end of the night
really, what have you won?
you'll end up alone
with love that isn't real
remember this is what you wanted
your own fate you have sealed
when you had the chance
you should have walked away
this is your hell now
this is where you shall remain
isn't it awesome?
isn't it fun?
you're finally just like me
and finally my work is done.

I Thought of You Today,
And What We Could've Had
For A Brief Moment I Had You
And Still, I Somehow Knew
I'd Have To Let Go

© Copyright 2009 TrinaMarie73 - All Rights Reserved
dickpoetry
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since 2009-09-30
Posts 89

1 posted 2009-10-02 06:22 PM


pretty spicy stuff
athousandstars
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since 2009-10-02
Posts 3

2 posted 2009-10-03 12:04 PM


Good poem, nicely done
ShadowOfLies
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since 2009-06-21
Posts 13

3 posted 2009-10-05 10:22 AM


Very good write. Really enjoyed reading this poem...

Brian

Mr Naz
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since 2009-10-22
Posts 29
London United Kingdom
4 posted 2009-10-25 04:19 AM


nice work
MorningStar
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since 2009-10-26
Posts 290
Pittsburgh, Pa
5 posted 2009-10-28 09:34 AM


This is amazing.  It's the 2nd piece I've read of yours and yet again I'm blown away.  
HippinTrippy
Member
since 2010-03-26
Posts 103
New York
6 posted 2010-11-30 01:32 PM


Wow! When I get chills from a poem.. I know it's a good one.
I can very much relate to this as well.. I'm not sure if that's a good thing but the answer to that is still being written itself.  
Thank you for sharing.

It's not easy being evil, in a world gone to hell.

Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
7 posted 2010-11-30 02:03 PM


Good grief! Bone-chilling it is indeed. One of the qualities of a goop poem is not only the words or the presentation, it's coming up with unique ideas and presenting them in a way no one else has pursued. You have done that here...applause!
pyre
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since 2008-05-16
Posts 136

8 posted 2010-11-30 03:06 PM


Right on...  That was nice... Well a bit mean, but nice.

Does she pray, or am I prey?  

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan
9 posted 2010-11-30 09:14 PM


Isn`t it awesome? Isn`t it fun?  Have taken on a whole new meaning.  Quality write as usual.
bigthinker8
Junior Member
since 2010-11-22
Posts 19
Chicago Il
10 posted 2010-12-13 11:17 AM


Ah yes Alice doesn't live here anymore...or does she? Enjoyed, thanks.
Swisha
Junior Member
since 2009-07-22
Posts 32

11 posted 2010-12-15 10:10 PM


Wow! I really love this... Sometimes I wish I could write in uneven lines and make it flow so well. I can't do that unfortunately. But you did just that, and it sounds smoother than anything i've wrote. Great stuff! Maybe read my last one, and give me pointers :p haha
JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991
Louisiana/America
12 posted 2010-12-16 10:39 AM


Ah, yes Trina, but we follow our instincts as we hope for another ending to the story.

http://swamprighter.wordpress.com/

Walter Poe
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 787

13 posted 2010-12-19 03:49 PM


Very smooth reminds me of well me a long time ago. With an ego like mine that is about the biggest complimment i can give.
Walter Poe
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 787

14 posted 2013-02-04 09:04 PM


library


JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
15 posted 2013-06-19 01:48 AM


Enjoyed reading this...James
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