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pyre
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since 2008-05-16
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0 posted 2009-09-09 05:37 PM



I have found that promised land
And it needs cleaning up
The devils have their toils
The work of bending minds
And destroying lives
Toil on toiling forever
Until its pouring clay
Inside infernal boilers

Christ dismissed
I never imagined this
Let Him prove himself
Again and again

Does she pray, or am I prey?  

© Copyright 2009 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
Def-init
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since 2008-12-03
Posts 186
Toronto, Canada
1 posted 2009-09-19 09:17 AM


I feel what you are trying to say in your piece.

Not a bad poem by any means. I just feel it is lacking something. But I also cant quite place what it is....

- If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell -

pyre
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since 2008-05-16
Posts 136

2 posted 2010-02-21 10:33 PM


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