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prize Member
since 2008-11-21
Posts 116 |
Relapse is a fall from grace To slip away and lose your place From life's monotonous rat-of-a-race Drawn forward by a devilish lace- He pulls you on a wayward path The noose, it tightens, as you gasp For air, for life, not on this track Of twisted lines and cellophane packs Continue, trapped, your body weak Teetering hopelessly on a forelorn peak He's got you now, your soul he seeks Tears of despair stream down your cheek It's now too late - the end is near The wind, it whispers in your ear "I will pleasure you eternally in my lair- Wrap your hand in Death, my lovely dear." |
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ProzacPoet New Member
since 2009-04-21
Posts 5NY, usa |
Wow, you finally posted!!!!!!!! I have been checking everyday since April!!! I hope all is well...I miss PRIZE... I have written over 20 poems since May and some of the stuff is really dark & depressing. I have had many up/down days over the past few months. June was very tough for me but July is getting better. Thank god for meds and therapy! lol |
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Def-init Member
since 2008-12-03
Posts 186Toronto, Canada |
"Relapse is a fall from grace To slip away and lose your place From life's monotonous rat-of-a-race Drawn forward by a devilish lace- He pulls you on a wayward path The noose, it tightens, as you gasp For air, for life, not on this track Of twisted lines and cellophane packs" ^^ Very slick. Nice to see yeah posting again, Prize  This poem is a very solid drop, man. Good rhyme scheme, great content. Dark wordplay at it's finest. - If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell - |
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prize Member
since 2008-11-21
Posts 116 |
Hi prozacpoet and def, TY for your responses-I really do feel connected to both of your writings. Prozacpoet- it is great to hear from you too. I have also been trudging along...yes, a tough few months for me too. I miss posting and writing! It is definitely part of my own therapy! I miss your poems and I hope to read some of your new poems soon Def, thanks for you compliments on my poem - I very much related to your poem on addiction- thank you. Reading and relating to others' writings ( esp. Your poetry and prozacpoet's poetry) helps ME. --p |
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Swisha Junior Member
since 2009-07-22
Posts 32 |
I really love the style you write with. It's exactly how i try to write, i'm just not near as good at it.. I wish i had somethin constructive for ya, but only praise. Great one, i'll have to check some more out for sure |
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Def-init Member
since 2008-12-03
Posts 186Toronto, Canada |
That's good to hear. You should check out "End of Days" I made a flash to go along with the poem. The link is with the poem. I think you will like it. - If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell - |
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ProzacPoet New Member
since 2009-04-21
Posts 5NY, usa |
Hey Prize... HANG IN THERE!! I know how hard it is!! If you want an email with my latest/greatest, let me know. Keep your chin up, people do care and want you to succeed, even people that you have never met before! PP |
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jesse3003 New Member
since 2009-07-23
Posts 3 |
I can relate to this alot man! Thanks for writing such a beautiful piece of poetry. |
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prize Member
since 2008-11-21
Posts 116 |
Thank you Def, PP, and J, Def - thanks for directing me to your poem and flash video to go along with it - you're right - I loved it! Very artistic and what a great poem. ProzacPoet - Thank you for your positive words and, of course, I'd love to read your poems. J - thank you for your feedback as well; I'm glad you appreciated it. P |
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