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Elemental Warrior Junior Member
since 2009-05-27
Posts 20North Carolina |
First try at darkened poems, give me suggestions or give me complaints, I accept them the same Darkness Dream Dreams can’t breathe Suffocates the sea Must we live a lie Or is there hope Fire brought down Burning our soul Tearing us apart Letting us know Nobody knows how Or even cares We go on blindly Ignoring the pain Why must we live this lie? Is this really our fate? No, I won’t let this happen Not to me, not I |
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lol@megan New Member
since 2009-06-11
Posts 7 |
I really like this! The one thing on the third stanza i think that 'blindly' should just be 'blind' i mean i think it would sound better(: Otherwise its great, keep it up!  |
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