A Celtic Curse.( The Beast I )

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Dark Poetry #5

A Celtic Curse.( The Beast I )

vampirelover
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since 2009-05-17

Posts 74

0 posted 2009-05-27 06:10 AM

Beware the fascist left,
beware the phoney adept;
beware the “chosen one”
who put the bullets in the gun.

Be far away from she
who stirs a gentle sea;
beware the ballyhoo
and the wigga too;

she whose heart is cold
who persecutes the old,
who crushes the baby’s head
till he lies cold and dead.

Be not near the one
whose time is almost done;
a long time she has fought
from her elfin grot.

Be far apart from one
who murders her own son;
do not your friendship give
to the killer of her kin.

She whose heart is cold
who persecutes the old,
who crushes the baby’s head
till he lies cold and dead.

Beware the phoney feminist
(who when she’s dead will not be missed)
twisting with her pen
her dark hatred of men.

Avoid the Puritan
(be she woman or be he man)
she who dares condemn
naked Art with brush or pen.

She whose heart is cold
who persecutes the old,
who crushes the baby’s head
till he lies cold and dead.

Have no part with her
half-educated mare
who claims erotic Art
demeans the female part.

Beware the Dreadful Blight
the evil and the spite.
Revenge has now begun
…and so this curse is done.

Suncleaver
Member

since 2009-01-18

Posts 481
Stafford England

1 posted 2009-05-28 03:32 AM

This is very sophisticated and poignant work, Vampire.

vampirelover
Member

since 2009-05-17

Posts 74

2 posted 2009-05-28 05:10 AM

Glad you like it, Suncleaver.

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

3 posted 2009-06-07 09:58 PM

Har har, well written! The beast is immediately evocative of Revelation and its beast (the guy whose phone number is 666). I love how you go and you grab the people who go too far (a la what you said people accuse you of earlier

) and place them in your beware lines.

Something you might like to work on with this piece is line length. Your parenthetical notes are a tad long at times, breaking the pattern of size you've got going here.

Life's short. Think hard!
Me!

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

4 posted 2009-07-17 02:30 PM

I may not agree with everything written here but I certainly know talent when I see it..

Very well done.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

vampirelover
Member

since 2009-05-17

Posts 74

5 posted 2009-07-17 06:03 PM

Thanks, Fractal.
Thank you for your kind coments, Susan.

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