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Dark Poetry #5

Scars

Twi
Junior Member

since 2009-05-21

Posts 22
the Underworld

0 posted 2009-05-26 02:16 PM

We all have our own battles.
Whether it's internally,
Or externally.
We all feel pain
More than once in our lives.
Whether we lost someone close,
Or inflicted injury,
We are all the same.
We forget about the tears,
And the pain,
But the scars are permanent.

§Bella§

[This message has been edited by JenniferMaxwell (05-27-2009 09:50 AM).]

Def-init
Member

since 2008-12-03

Posts 186
Toronto, Canada

1 posted 2009-06-18 04:04 PM

Good attempt on this poem. I feel thou that you could have added more to it. Increased the substance as well. Keep writing and keep expanding on your ideas.

- If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell -

midnightdreamer
Member

since 2008-02-03

Posts 309
Roy,ut

2 posted 2009-07-05 02:23 PM

so true. so dont hide them. it shows the real u.

She past you, but doesn't notice you.
Drained from emotion
she waits till death grasps her.
She faces it with no fear but rather welcomes it.

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