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youhurtmeagain
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since 2009-04-23
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0 posted 2009-04-23 02:09 PM


\As I lay there, I realize I'm dead.

Could all of this just be in your head?
NO, I am filled with knowledge of the universe
Memories flash; everything begins to disperse.
Everything that’s EVER happened to you.
As I watch this play out, events happening on cue
I’m sad that I’m dead, but suddenly I REALIZE
it’s my FAMILY I feel bad for, tears roll from my lifeless body's eyes.
I'm not sad because I'm dead,
I'm sad because of my families DREAD, them knowing I'm dead.
I want to say sorry, they will be so upset
But it’s too late, no need to fret
Life after death, still a never-ending love
you become enlightened with this from above.
With a greater understanding I plea for a second chance.
Granted, with this lifeless lesson I can now advance.
And I'm now thankful for life, yes life itself,
however I now no longer think of only MYSELF.
I love my family more than anything in the world,
I learned that night when my life unfurled.

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ProzacPoet
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since 2009-04-21
Posts 5
NY, usa
1 posted 2009-04-23 02:51 PM


wow....all i can say is WOW...

i know the feeling well that you describe about having a 2nd chance...i am thankful everyday that i am alive cause i saw the end right before my eyes....

great work...

prize
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since 2008-11-21
Posts 116

2 posted 2009-04-23 08:50 PM


I second the 'wow!'

Thanks for the share - 2nd chances, yes - we all deserve them and some of us don't get the chance.  I'm glad that all of us on this forum struggling get to have a 2nd chance!

Excellent ~P

wolfy09
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since 2008-06-10
Posts 93

3 posted 2009-04-29 06:03 PM


i third the WOW
Rocheal
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since 2009-03-15
Posts 25

4 posted 2009-05-08 09:17 PM


Yes, wow!! Wonderful work.
youhurtmeagain
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since 2009-04-23
Posts 9

5 posted 2009-05-19 04:00 PM


Thanks everyone, it feels good to have positive responses on your work. :-)
crosscountry83
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since 2009-07-30
Posts 345

6 posted 2009-08-04 10:19 PM


Wow # 5!
Awesome work

Rileigh

Def-init
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since 2008-12-03
Posts 186
Toronto, Canada
7 posted 2009-08-05 10:15 AM


I am very impressed with this piece.
It was a solid read from top to bottom.
I would love to read more from yeah

- If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell -

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20
Posts 891
Neverland
8 posted 2009-08-06 03:00 PM


Very well written. This definitely gives a different view.
Two thumbs up!   

{~~*~~}


Lacrimosa Dies Illa
[Oh that tearful day]
    {~~*~~}

Abbeon
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since 2006-11-30
Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder
9 posted 2009-08-06 05:28 PM


I loved it, a second chance, and the ability to change. Its wonderful.

Words have power, Im going to unleash the power of my soul.

LaGraceLa
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since 2011-01-30
Posts 243
Minnesota, USA
10 posted 2011-02-21 09:35 PM


Amazing, I love it.
XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435
Antarctica
11 posted 2011-03-25 08:29 AM


It all ties together well. Great subject matter also. Hope and a second chance are like cool water for the soul in the middle of a parched world.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

FloraScars
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since 2010-11-08
Posts 33
VA, USA
12 posted 2011-03-28 04:30 PM


this an absolutely lovely poem. an amazing subject. Like basically being reborn into a better person, like that experience changed you to do better, than before.

very creative.

rachel_anubis
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since 2011-03-24
Posts 43

13 posted 2011-09-08 01:44 AM


WOW
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