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illuminated truth
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0 posted 2009-04-17 02:34 PM


Enemy in disguise
Mask around the eyes
Enough of the propaganda
Just read me my Miranda

That's right, my rights
And for them I will fight
All day and all night
Until the end

You're just pretend
The future's bleak
Figurehead, you just speak
But it doesn't matter

It's all just chatter.
Know who's in control.
Just an actor playing a role.
Selling the devil my soul.

And for what? gold?
Diamonds and rings
You know, the finer things.
But are they really?

The thought is just silly
Even though it's true
Not money, but selfishness pursue
Shows just how much evil one will do

None of us are immune
Emotions change like a monsoon
Just like mines
A game of the mind

All controlled by my enemy
Easily defeating me
Even through the mirror
The image is getting clearer

The reflection of me
Gave me an epiphany
Through the eyes, I can see
The soul of the enemy
Through the reflection of me

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JenniferMaxwell
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1 posted 2009-04-17 04:55 PM


Welcome to the Dark forum! I've read some of your work before in Teen and CA.

I see your critique message is NO, so just a quick comment to let you know I enjoyed reading your poem. The closing lines in your poem were haunting.

"The reflection of me
Gave me an epiphany
Through the eyes, I can see
The soul of the enemy
Through the reflection of me"


illuminated truth
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2 posted 2009-04-17 07:25 PM


Thanks. And you can critique it. I really don't know how or where to change the critique msg. But feel free.
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3 posted 2009-04-17 07:56 PM


To change your critique message click “Member’s Area” at the top left of this page. That will take you to the Member’s Area page where you click “Change Profile”. About half way down that page you will see the Encourage Critique Yes or No buttons followed by a box where you can be a little more specific about what you’re seeking - for instance, gentle critic, help with meter, form...something along those lines.  
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