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Suncleaver
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since 2009-01-18
Posts 481
Stafford England

0 posted 2009-01-22 08:48 PM


You look so cold are you sleeping?
I feel your heartbeat flutter against mine
Like a tiny moth trapped in glass
You murmur and tilt your head
I feel your hair brush against me sensuously

As I stroke your pale slender arm I see the wounds
The cruel kisses of the needle's vampirism
Would you rather keep those?
Than the gentle ones I placed upon your neck and inner thigh?
My eyes swell with tears

I reach out and feel the contour of your cheek beneath my fingertips
You frame a silent word of love and turn away
Away So I caress the gentle curve of your back
Veiled by your soft raven hair
I draw you close

You turn to me and your full voluptuous lips meet mine
I know I cannot keep you
I know you may not even be long for this world
But this perfect moment I will capture for eternity
I love you


Dedicated to my teenage love who shall remain nameless. Nothing compares to the horror of losing someone to heroin.


On the seashore I espy the dreadful void under the tides

© Copyright 2009 Luke Doubtfire - All Rights Reserved
Def-init
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since 2008-12-03
Posts 186
Toronto, Canada
1 posted 2009-01-23 12:05 PM


.... Ayo. I am feeling this, hardcore man.
Been in the same position. This brings back memories I had long forgotten.
I thank you for being able to share your pain here with us.

SlowlyFallAway
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since 2008-08-29
Posts 279
North Carolina
2 posted 2009-02-12 01:22 AM


I'm speechless. You did an excellent job at putting a situation like this is poetry format. I know how you feel, I just lost my best friend to an OD on methadone.
rkcraig
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since 2003-02-27
Posts 202
Cincinnati, Ohio, USA
3 posted 2009-02-12 02:24 AM


like this work.  I had a friend who almost died from heroin but now he is fully recovered and has a family  I am sorry for your loss
Suncleaver
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since 2009-01-18
Posts 481
Stafford England
4 posted 2009-02-12 03:57 AM


I thank you for your kind words guys, they mean a lot to me.

SlowlyFallAway, I am deeply sorry for your loss as only one who's experienced it can be. Now I must tell you what I believe, you must get out of that kind of world as fast as you can before it's too late. If I hadn't I would be dead. It took that tragedy and the ruin it brought to pull me away from it.

If you can save someone close to you along the way then do it. But don't get dragged down as well, and don't think that you can support someone in that kind of situation.

There are no real second chances against drugs.

Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told.

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20
Posts 891
Neverland
5 posted 2009-02-19 02:19 PM


Fantastic write. I really like how you ended it; but Im sorry that you have to deal with something like that.

Best wishes,

{~~*~~}

Emmalee Janelle
   {~~*~~}


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