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Monster |
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dark_romance New Member
since 2009-01-12
Posts 1Australia |
The stars are out, shining bright but the monster lurks, in the night wherever I look, the monster’s there haunting my thoughts- his lair there is no rest, no reprieve I can’t be happy, I only grieve He taints my feelings, turns them blue I yearn for the light, all clear and new I can’t escape his constant lies With not even my heart as an ally The internal battle rages on I feel myself drowning, I’m too long gone |
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Def-init Member
since 2008-12-03
Posts 186Toronto, Canada |
"He taints my feelings, turns them blue I yearn for the light, all clear and new I can’t escape his constant lies With not even my heart as an ally The internal battle rages on I feel myself drowning, I’m too long gone" That had a lot of heart. That's a deep outlook for someone your age. Good amount of rhyme in this piece to. Keep writing Dark. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
About the time we feel we are at the end of our rope, a hand reaches out every time. Nicely done. |
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wwzwlmd8 Member
since 2006-09-23
Posts 96San Diego,CA |
this was great ~Indya |
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sarah 45 Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 54 |
I'll tell you what u're only 14 and writing in such a beautiful way, you got the nice rhyme & all, so keep up the good work T.C |
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