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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Seeking after meaning I stumbled in the darkness in fresh canvass white paper waiting for God's light I treated the creative Image in empty media like garbage because it wasn't real I forgot that Acquired Understanding Is the way I Learned to tread this Consensual Fiction to order the Chaos of my existence and Submit to Fantasy Ground yourself in fakery and fear and everyone will respect you as a productive member of our society. |
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JenniferMaxwell
since 2006-09-14
Posts 2423 |
You put so much effort into formatting, and do it so well, makes me wonder if you consider your poetry only for the page rather than to be read out loud. This one works beautifully either way. |
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Def-init Member
since 2008-12-03
Posts 186Toronto, Canada |
Ayo, Very nice layout. It added another dimension to your poem. I enjoyed it a lot. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Hey Jen: I actually try to aim for both presentation and reading when I write stuff like this. The idea is to make is so it's possible to read the poem in a few different ways. I honestly didn't like this one as much as some of my others, since its readability doesn't work as well when not read top-down. I'm going for a kind of dialog in most of my latest poems, where it's possible to read subtleties and also to see two or more voices trading barbs or arguments. My poems about the depressing woman are an example. Life's short. Think hard! |
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