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When you're gone
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When you're gone |
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sarah 45 Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 54 |
When you're gone; It's like standing between 2 worlds in the middle of the real nowhere starring at nothing at all while watching your empty shadow fading away things crawling into my soul taking every memory I have left for you all those dark alliens screaming at my shallow being to forget about the 1 thing that I can sayI truly knew I never knew how to let go of anything even things that made me go through hell I know now that I can let go of everything But you're the big question wondering why ??? I'm always wondering why? I really wish you would know how much I I try to convince myselfwith a simple lie people like me do that alot we wait and wait beside the door sittingon this cold freezing floor waiting for ever for something we'll get as soon as never waiting for those clouds to disappear and we can finally feelit so very near thiswarmfeelings that everyone seeks this honest warm moments that break the ice thatis surrounding our hearts And while everyone is telling you it'llbe ok It's not!!!!!!!! But time heals , or so they say and eventually you'll learn how to hide let go , but still hold on to memories so tight It'll always be so much harder than you think especially waking up everyday But it's gonna get easier..... if you would just give yourself a break |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Welcome to Pip, dear Sarah! I enjoyed reading your first entry, it is a well rendered romantic and melancholic write. It also holds determination to overcome the pain, something that I always appreciate. Love, Margherita  |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Heartbreaking and I am sure many can relate to. Thanks for sharing. Very well written. And excellently thought out.. Annie |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
very authentic and touching, I enjoyed your poem. yann |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Nice twist in this and I like how you lead up to it. Very enjoyable read! Eric |
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sarah 45 Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 54 |
Thanks alot every1 ,appreciate it I'll try my best 2 be good enough 2 be a member of this great collection of some real great writers...... |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
I loved the last line in this. People spend so much time beating themselves up for just being human... Well done and welcome!!! kat |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"if you would just give yourself a break"...a deeply rich and so very true piece of wisdom...welcome to PiP |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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sarah 45 Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 54 |
thanks alot 2 U all ... T.C |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"for something we'll get as soon as never"... those are such true words... M |
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r v wooo Senior Member
since 2007-08-07
Posts 656 |
enjoyed your poem and the feeling it gives to me. i am able to relate to that feeling. also, the name, sarah 45, caught my eye. i have a friend, sarah 2810. she works the 2800 shift at post 810 lambert international airport st. louis. i was a teacher for 40 years and now work for the boeing company. my two favorite hobbys are working and writing but not necessarily "favorite" in that order. i believe you have a future in writing. i sense character in your being! thank you for sharing your poem. RV |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sarah, Welcome to Passions in Poetry! Please, check your email for a Very Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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sarah 45 Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 54 |
nakdthoughts; appreciate you stopping by and reading this, thanks. |
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sarah 45 Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 54 |
Sunshine indeed, thanks alot 4 the Greeting card .....U'RE such a nice lady and I'm glad you like it T.C |
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sarah 45 Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 54 |
Dear r v wooo ; just so you know I didn't read your comment on this one B4 I wrote mine, I'm so thankful you shared your story with me, you know now I can understand your writing even more, and I'm real honored you think that way of me too T.C |
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