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sarah 45
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since 12-19-2008
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0 posted 12-27-2008 09:51 AM       View Profile for sarah 45   Email sarah 45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sarah 45



When you're gone;

It's like standing between 2 worlds
in the middle of the real nowhere
starring at nothing at all
while watching your empty shadow fading away
things crawling into my soul
taking every memory I have left for you
all those dark alliens screaming at my shallow
being to forget about the 1 thing that I can sayI truly knew
I never knew how to let go of anything
even things that made me go through hell
I know now that I can let go of everything
But you're the big question wondering why ???
I'm always wondering why?
I really wish you would know how much I
I try to convince myselfwith a simple lie
people like me do that alot
we wait and wait beside the door
sittingon this cold freezing floor
waiting for ever
for something we'll get as soon as never
waiting for those clouds to disappear
and we can finally feelit so very near
thiswarmfeelings that everyone seeks
this honest warm moments
that break the ice thatis surrounding our hearts

And while everyone is telling you it'llbe ok
It's not!!!!!!!!
But time heals , or so they say
and eventually you'll learn how to hide
let go , but still hold on to memories so tight
It'll always be so much harder than you think
especially waking up everyday
But it's gonna get easier..... if you would just give yourself a break

© Copyright 2008 sarah saad - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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since 02-08-2003
Posts 21103
Eternity


1 posted 12-27-2008 12:42 PM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

Welcome to Pip, dear Sarah!

I enjoyed reading your first entry, it is a well rendered romantic and melancholic write. It also holds determination to overcome the pain, something that I always appreciate.

Love,
Margherita
Anniepimm
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since 12-26-2008
Posts 549
England


2 posted 12-27-2008 12:43 PM       View Profile for Anniepimm   Email Anniepimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Anniepimm's Home Page   View IP for Anniepimm

Heartbreaking and I am sure many can relate to. Thanks for sharing. Very well written.
And excellently thought out..

Annie
2islander2
Member Ascendant
since 03-12-2008
Posts 5028
by the sea


3 posted 12-27-2008 12:55 PM       View Profile for 2islander2   Email 2islander2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for 2islander2

very authentic and touching, I enjoyed your poem.

yann
ethome
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since 05-14-2000
Posts 11545
New Brunswick Canada


4 posted 12-27-2008 12:59 PM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

Nice twist in this and I like how you lead up to it.

Very enjoyable read!

Eric
sarah 45
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since 12-19-2008
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5 posted 12-27-2008 02:09 PM       View Profile for sarah 45   Email sarah 45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sarah 45

Thanks alot every1 ,appreciate it I'll try my best 2 be good enough 2 be a member of this great collection of some real great writers......
amusemi
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since 12-08-2001
Posts 1300
A State of Disarray


6 posted 12-27-2008 09:08 PM       View Profile for amusemi   Email amusemi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amusemi

I loved the last line in this.  People spend so much time beating themselves up for just being human... Well done and welcome!!! kat
steavenr
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since 11-17-2003
Posts 4078


7 posted 12-28-2008 08:47 PM       View Profile for steavenr   Email steavenr   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit steavenr's Home Page   View IP for steavenr

"if you would just give yourself a break"...a deeply rich and so very true piece of wisdom...welcome to PiP
JamesMichael
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since 11-16-1999
Posts 31622
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA


8 posted 12-29-2008 09:46 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Fine writing...James
sarah 45
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since 12-19-2008
Posts 54


9 posted 01-04-2009 02:17 PM       View Profile for sarah 45   Email sarah 45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sarah 45

thanks alot 2 U all ... T.C
nakdthoughts
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since 10-29-2000
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Between the Lines


10 posted 01-04-2009 04:04 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

"for something we'll get as soon as never"...

those are such true words...

M
r v wooo
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since 08-07-2007
Posts 656


11 posted 01-16-2009 09:25 AM       View Profile for r v wooo   Email r v wooo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for r v wooo

enjoyed your poem and the feeling it gives to me. i am able to relate to that feeling. also, the name, sarah 45, caught my eye. i have a friend, sarah 2810. she works the 2800 shift at post 810 lambert international airport st. louis. i was a teacher for 40 years and now work for the boeing company. my two favorite hobbys are working and writing but not necessarily "favorite" in that order. i believe you have a future in writing. i sense character in your being! thank you for sharing your poem. RV
Sunshine
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since 06-25-99
Posts 67715
Listening to every heart


12 posted 01-16-2009 12:11 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Sarah,

Welcome to Passions in Poetry! Please,
check your email for a Very Special Greeting!

" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

sarah 45
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since 12-19-2008
Posts 54


13 posted 01-16-2009 01:12 PM       View Profile for sarah 45   Email sarah 45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sarah 45

nakdthoughts;
appreciate you stopping by and reading this, thanks.

sarah 45
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since 12-19-2008
Posts 54


14 posted 01-16-2009 01:17 PM       View Profile for sarah 45   Email sarah 45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sarah 45

Sunshine indeed, thanks alot 4 the Greeting card .....U'RE such a nice lady and I'm glad you like it
T.C
sarah 45
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since 12-19-2008
Posts 54


15 posted 01-16-2009 01:29 PM       View Profile for sarah 45   Email sarah 45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sarah 45

Dear r v wooo ;
just so you know I didn't read your comment on this one B4 I wrote mine, I'm so thankful you shared your story with me, you know now I can understand your writing even more, and I'm real honored you think that way of me too
T.C
 
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