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Newpoet
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0 posted 2008-12-23 02:19 AM


Shamrock pastures gleaming in the sun,
Relax on the grass, while little sister runs,

Trees crowd around the edges of terrain,
Leaves drip from yesterday’s morning rain,

Beyond the land, mountains sour in the sky,
She lays on the blanket and closes her eyes,

Clouds float above rigid mountainous escapes,
Earthly skyscrapers are now distant shapes

There’s an unknown spirituality in these lands.
I might always seek it, but I’ll never understand.

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Marc-Andre
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1 posted 2008-12-23 03:19 AM


A fine, evocative piece of writing Mark
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2 posted 2008-12-23 03:46 AM


NewPoet~
Your couplets are full of expressions of beauty~

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~*Marge*~

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3 posted 2008-12-23 07:36 AM


This is very well done, with vivid imagery one can reach out and touch.
WolfHeart
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4 posted 2008-12-23 02:30 PM


Very vivid imagery that is like a lullaby.
Sweet thoughts float from the words into the heart and add beauty to the world.

"Love the unloveable; they need it most of all."

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