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The Shudder-Switch

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 12-20-2008 07:44 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

Remind me I must make a list
of the things I can't forget
imbedded deeply in my brain
so deep my mouth denies the pain
as "instinct" kicks the shudder-switch
I am sideblinded by design --
the pounding peen of hammerhead
haunting me with vagaries
fleeting visuals I see
like those ghosts in Disneyworld
appearing in my twirling seat.

Pop a top and crack a joke
before I curse these fraught-drenched sheets
twisted into questions marks
an interrogatory poke:
Remember what you dream
keystroked,
into my waking manuscript...

I wrestle the indifference
from the pillows I detest
since they don't know
or they just won't
concede the subtle differences
between my tears and sweat.
© Copyright 2008 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
steavenr
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1 posted 12-20-2008 08:57 PM       View Profile for steavenr   Email steavenr   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit steavenr's Home Page   View IP for steavenr

cool write...very cool phrase:

"fraught-drenched sheets"
Marchmadness
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So. El Monte, California


2 posted 12-21-2008 04:53 AM       View Profile for Marchmadness   Email Marchmadness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marchmadness

I wish I could turn off that damn switch and get some sleep, too, Karen. You always know how to say it.
                            Ida
2islander2
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since 03-12-2008
Posts 5028
by the sea


3 posted 12-21-2008 05:21 AM       View Profile for 2islander2   Email 2islander2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for 2islander2

wrestle the indifference
from the pillows I detest
since they don't know
or they just won't
concede the subtle differences
between my tears and sweat.

so well written, enjoyed it.

yann
inkedgoddess
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since 11-19-2002
Posts 7522
Ohio


4 posted 12-21-2008 09:48 AM       View Profile for inkedgoddess   Email inkedgoddess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for inkedgoddess

so unfair
that world onto itself
that we get to peep
like mere voyeurs
as its having its way
with our psyche

damn demons, begone...................

Balladeer
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5 posted 12-21-2008 10:11 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Sheets twisted into question marks...WOW!

You're a genius in your own way, serenity gal. Thank God we DO forget some things....
wranx
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6 posted 12-21-2008 10:33 AM       View Profile for wranx   Email wranx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wranx

I've been neglecting to read what you've had to say for a bit...

Just because I don't write is a poor excuse not to read.

and this is something I'm glad to have read

100% Karenity
serenity blaze
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7 posted 12-21-2008 03:43 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Ya'll are lovely.

and I'm outta melatonin.

(The stuff works! )
Bill Charles
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8 posted 12-21-2008 08:32 PM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

serenity blaze - said very well...

BC
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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!


9 posted 12-27-2008 01:23 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

You know, I'll buy your book.  I will and the next one and the next one.  I'll be your groupie.  Write it and I'll be there, wallet in hand.

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ethome
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10 posted 12-27-2008 06:53 AM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

You go deep under the smoky blue clouds.

You are a precious weaver, be it deeply blue or otherwise. Good thing you're addicted to your relief valve.......

Take care

Eric
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11 posted 04-24-2010 03:07 PM       View Profile for latearrival   Email latearrival   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for latearrival

You are too much and write too little.
 
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