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Hunter's Moon
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since 2008-12-17

Posts 3
Virginia, USA

0 posted 2008-12-17 08:26 PM

Runes

Blank verse, free verse, I can’t see
why should I call that poetry?
Why should I waste my time
when I could be immersed in rhyme?

There’s something about the ebb and flow
of rhyming words. I want to know
how anything could be much sweeter
than listening to the music of a lilting meter.

Acrostic, cinquain, ancient haiku
to me, none of these will do.
Give me the whimsy of Clerihew
four bright lines of varied hue.

While I can respect the form,
Pleiades doesn’t keep me warm.
I prefer a rhyming puzzle
structured like the Persian Ghazal.

So keep your sestina and triad,
not that I think of them as bad,
but I prefer my mind to dwell
on the multi-rhyming villanelle.

Only one verse of the dorsimbra
rhymes and that leaves me feeling blah.
And, so I’ll cast this magic chant
in hopes that rhyme will soon supplant.

“Double, double toil and trouble;
Fire burn, and caldron bubble.”
Save us all from unrhymed hell,
bless us with your doggerel.

Note: Just a little poetry humor for those of us who love rhyme

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

1 posted 2008-12-17 08:50 PM

Hey Welcome!!!!!!! Keep it up man!

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

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2 posted 2008-12-17 09:59 PM

Hunter's Moon - looking good...

BC

Vestibular Bard
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since 2008-12-11

Posts 284
New York

3 posted 2008-12-17 10:08 PM

Hey Hunter’s Moon! How do you do?
When it comes to rhyming, I’m with you.
That free verse stuff gets too sublime,
It’s best for folks, who can’t bust rhyme.

I read free verse sayin’; ‘holy crap!’
It’s one big adjective attack!
Sometimes I really get perturbed,
I just keep searching for the verb!

Hey, talk about your ‘lilting meter’
Yer second stanza could be sweeter.
And you use words, that I don’t know,
I’m just a bard, and kinda slow

That last stanza sure rang a bell,
I thought that was some witches spell?
But hopefully that brief refrain,
Is safely in public domain…

I’m looking forward to your rhymes
With good acrostics, they’ll sound fine…
I’m gonna click a lot on you,
‘Cause I know I won’t get….

…lame haiku!

Callista
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since 2008-10-05

Posts 63
USA

4 posted 2008-12-17 10:14 PM

I wasted
my time
on rhyme,
but was
pleasantly surprised.

Thanks for sharing!

"The Moving Finger writes, and, having writ,
Moves on: nor all thy Piety nor Wit
Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line.."

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

5 posted 2008-12-17 10:50 PM

welcome, though you will add to outnumbering those of us who love free verse, welcome to PiP...my original mentor (a Mr. McCamish) explained that in order to have the right to break all the rules, I first had to learn them...so while I do love all the rules, I do love the free expression that comes from breaking them

Callista
Member

since 2008-10-05

Posts 63
USA

6 posted 2008-12-21 01:37 AM

I relish the thought of having a mentor, but am basically stumbling around "expressing myself" as best I can, while reading about sonnets and villanelle.

Marc-Andre
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since 2008-12-07

Posts 501

7 posted 2008-12-21 02:13 AM

An excellent poem

I'm with you on form, with one reservation. I wouldn't associate blank verse with free verse. Blank verse is unrhymed iambic pentameter that with a restricted and judicial use of metrical substitutions, enjambments etc. can produce powerful lines: John Milton's Paradise Lost comes to mind. So do many Elizabethean dramatic pieces, such as Marlowe's Dr. Faustus and the plays of Shakespeare. In recent times, there is Robert Frost who writes exquisite blank verse.

Actually, I find it a lot harder to produce effective blank verse than it is to pen a decent poem in a stricter form that gives me freedom from prolixity and wandering thoughts.

As for free verse, I'm afraid this just isn't my bag. I believe that it is through craft that art is best displayed. I have seen a few works of free verse that were more than loosely-strung words dispersed on the page by the author's addiction to the enter key. Too often, however, all I see is little more execrable prose.

With all the ornaments available for poetry, such as feminine endings, truncated lines, alliterations and metrical substitution, along with the richness of our English vocabulary replete with etymologically-evocative and foreign words, surely we are still a long way from fully exploiting the contents of our dictionaries. The first piece of software I launch after turning on my laptop is Meriam-Webster's CD-rom.

Have a marvelous day, and a warm welcome to PiP

Mark

Sunshine

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8 posted 2008-12-21 01:33 PM

Welcome to Passions, Ken! We do enjoy reading and knowing the enchantment of one who knows not only have to rhyme, but to have great meter! Well done!

Please, check your email for a Very Special Greeting!

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

9 posted 2008-12-22 12:55 PM

Welcome, Ken. I enjoy most forms of poetry
and think this is very good. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Ida

LindsayP
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since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

10 posted 2008-12-22 11:49 PM

Welcome Ken to Pip, you will meet some great friends here. I write rhyming poetry myself but I enjoy nearly all poetry. I look forward to reading more from you.

Lindsay

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