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Open Poetry #43

You surrendered to me...

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2008-12-16 11:44 PM

You surrendered to me light-heartedly,
Only to overtake me suddenly -
Like a window curtain, you parted me,
Looking through me and past me solemnly, -
As if wanting to say something quietly,
You started telling me about him timidly -
But I understood everything silently
And I saw your pain rather vividly.
And with tears in my eyes: "Don’t leave me!
You and I are one. You will fracture me..."
You didn’t answer me, thinking naively
That I didn’t mean what I said actually.

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Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

1 posted 2008-12-16 11:51 PM

sad

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

2 posted 2008-12-17 12:22 PM

Honestly? I didn't expect to like this one, but I do because the emotion just kind of slapped me down.

A

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2008-12-17 01:58 AM

Like a window curtain, you parted me,
Looking through me and past me solemnly, -
As if wanting to say something quietly

Great lines! Nice to read you again.

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