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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2008-12-11 09:22 AM

you were the faster car in skin
but could go slower without momentum
with your heart partly undone
perhaps just a button or so unusual

and we didn't have our names on
or the need for words either
mutual attraction of skin endings
and how they felt smeared together

like the saliva on your glass
when you needed a drink quickly
and didn't have time for ladylike
as if I would mind you said

before you showed me your animals
in our silloettes on the walls
and we made new gods out of sinners
singing hymns with our vulgar words

just before tomorrow let me know you

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daark

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since 2000-01-18

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with you

1 posted 2008-12-11 10:17 AM

"with your heart partly undone
perhaps just a button or so unusual"

ohhhhhhhhhh yeah

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2008-12-11 12:15 PM

ms suesea..thanks babe

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

3 posted 2008-12-11 09:21 PM

"mutual attraction of skin endings" ...interesting line...goes well with the rest of the write

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

4 posted 2008-12-11 11:16 PM

"and we didn't have our names on
or the need for words either"

not velvet
more like silk

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

5 posted 2008-12-12 06:13 AM

steavenr, thanks amigo...

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ms slick...like slick silk? thanks babe

LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

6 posted 2008-12-12 09:24 AM

Yikes - the images this poem brings out. Great similes and a really great tease for imagining more. Super write!

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2008-12-12 09:33 AM

thanks amigo...much appreciated your comments

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

8 posted 2008-12-12 02:58 PM

Superb words for bringing the mind into wander of thoughts and this
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before you showed me your animals
in our silloettes on the walls
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intense in every word. Excellent sir.

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

9 posted 2008-12-12 04:17 PM

Thanks Mark...you smile me sir!

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

10 posted 2008-12-13 03:11 AM

It all tastes so good in my mind too. Know what I mean?

Goodnight, Daark.

A

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

11 posted 2008-12-13 06:28 AM

ms ali-san...yep...and it looks good there too

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

12 posted 2008-12-13 08:03 AM

I think this is one of you best, D.
Tasteful imagery that breathes passion.

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

13 posted 2008-12-14 09:56 AM

poetic passion perfectly personified Mr. D

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

14 posted 2008-12-14 10:09 AM

ms midnite...thanks babe

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ms gs, thank hon for the touch

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