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secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

0 posted 2008-12-10 10:30 AM

                 Value

Ahead…

a lone heron fog-floating
    into sunset

Behind…

a mountain moon rolling
   up barren slopes
in the winter-evening
   twilight

Above…

a galaxy turning
on some grand pivot
   of the universe

Below …

a forest lake reflecting
   our finest dreams

what value
hold the concerns
   of men?

     --- b. e. adams (12/10/2008)

[This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (12-11-2008 09:18 PM).]

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2008-12-10 11:25 AM

Philosophical nature writing at its best.

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

2 posted 2008-12-10 11:59 AM

love the format, love your wordsmith-hyphen constructs, and especially love your ending

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2008-12-10 02:44 PM

Indeed, "What value hold the concerns of men?" Reminds me of "If a tree falls in the forest...I will be keeping this one.
Ida

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

4 posted 2008-12-10 11:48 PM

Bruce,

I think this is one of the finest poems that you have posted in PiP. Thank you for sharing it with us.

Thinking of you,
Alison

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2008-12-11 06:58 PM

In the light of eternity, our concerns really do not matter anymore.

Wonderful write, dear Bruce!

Love,
Margherita

Vestibular Bard
Member

since 2008-12-11

Posts 284
New York

6 posted 2008-12-11 08:05 PM

"a galaxy turning
on some grand pivot
of the universe"

wonderful line...superb imagery!

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

7 posted 2008-12-11 08:18 PM

.

Drop
The "?"
at the end
and the '''s
around "concern"

Don't preach . . .
Then you've got
a good poem

John

.

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

8 posted 2008-12-11 09:17 PM

I agree pursuant to the quotation marks; but, I fail to see how correct punctuation is connected with preaching.

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