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Her Eyes
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Her Eyes |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA 
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Her Eyes She stands and stares with vacant gaze Her thoughts are filled with yesterdays The softness seen within her eyes Belies the pain that’s in disguise Once a lovely work of art She captured every passing heart Into her garden people came The men would laugh and call her name But as the days and years went by The laughing sounds would slowly die The many loves she used to know Have scattered like the leaves that blow Cherished once she’s now alone Within a garden overgrown Where joy and laughter used to play Lie echoes of a bye gone day But there are times at evening when Someone will stop to look and then They notice moisture in her eyes And wonder how a statue cries |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Steve, you are such a versatile poet. Everything you write is pure gold. This poem is exceptional. You have the seeing eyes and perceptions of a true poet.  Linda |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I liked this very much. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Lovely, Juju -Juju |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
nice cadence, nice rhyme, easily read aloud...well done & enjoyed |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I agree with Linda, Stephen. You are a master poet. Ida |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I personified this as being a mature woman, and it was just so bitter-sweet. So very well done, loved the theme. |
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TRACE2RYM Junior Member
since 2008-10-09
Posts 38 |
I love a poem that has a story, a base upon which to build, with a plot and surprize ending. The last line finishes this poem wonderfully. Beautiful, sad story. Very nice. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
I love this. I thought it was going to be an older woman and my defenses went up. So many are just in the way it seems today.vBut you fooled me. Great writing and thought. "late" |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Steve~ This is the loveliest whispered aloud poem~ It just rolls softly off the tongue in perfected cadence~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Stunning! |
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Arius Miura de Galdri Member
since 2007-07-04
Posts 90Michigan, USA |
Amazing, one of the best I've ever read, I think. AMdG "My candle burns at both ends; it will not last the night; but ah, my foes, and oh, my friends--it gives a lovely light!" -Edna St. Vincent Millay |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA |
Thanks to all for the warm comments. Marge it is great to see you back on the site again, I hope you are feeling better and will be back with us full time soon. Take care all. Steve |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Poignant perfection... beautiful work! |
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