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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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You made my beloved trees, faint in their stiff winter postures, the bareback walls of your dim little room spackle, my crimson heart splattered, you turned alabaster into waterfalls of warm love hurricanes rising inside me the december air, cold of night revamped with red stilleto desire all that and more much more, all you tapped upon with the touch of your golden rod but it just wasn't me to be the one that you loved. [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (12-05-2008 02:46 PM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Such vivid imagery and strong emotions, dear Michele! The conclusion has a bitter taste, but does one really know? Love, Margherita |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
but it just wasn't me that you loved. And that's the hardest thing to accept... when there are no reasons WHY... there's just the finality. Excellent write! |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear inkedgoddess, to feel in love and feel the passion within just becomes second prize when the who your affection is for hardly knows your name. Love is a gift, often window shoping can get us down too you know. Have a great day my friend and take care. Enjoyed your write, it brought many thoughts. Rick |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Such a lovely writer -Juju |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I always see double entendres in your writing and am envious of that skill... "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"red stiletto desire" You are intense, sweet lady. And some just can't handle that.  *shaking my head* "red stiletto desire" Now that's hot.  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Thanks for reading along with me. You're right Miss Blaze, most can't handle such fire..I'm not for the squeamish type.....  Now where's that darkstranger now? |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
such a heart-felt write with such a stoic ending...you let the reader feel your hurt in a strong way...excellent |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Could have been though...reminds me of an old Bob Dylan Song..."No, no, no it ain't me babe, it ain't me you're looking for babe"...James |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Awwww, this is so sad. Isn't that the way it always goes? |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
An exquisite poem (as usual!)! My first reaction, was how on earth could any man you have a relationship with not love you? But I should have known, and didn't think enough, and then when I read Karen's response, I thought how could I have not realised it because - been there, done that - have a wardrobeful of the tee-shirts! It's tough, and it's a pity. I hope you meet (or have met since) somebody who is as intense and good and kind as you and is deserving of you. - Owl |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
good grief I don't get to read you near enough  the way you say it packs so much emotion |
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