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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2008-12-03 08:39 AM


sometimes on occasional fridays
there was laughter in your voice
like you had a smile on, on purpose

and my mind would wonder of your hair
with the sun playing copper on gold
and how your eyes catch colors on fire

I didn't notice your charms then
any more then when my eyes were closed
and I knew your woman skin as if in dancing

and if you were a distance and I was travel
covering the playful hands of thought
with gloves that didn't fit our minds

but I would always try them on again
__________

daark

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (12-03-2008 12:49 PM).]

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1 posted 2008-12-03 10:38 AM


loved this D

felt very sentimental

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2008-12-03 11:52 AM


ms suesea..it is a special set of thoughts..thanks babe
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3 posted 2008-12-03 12:33 PM


never have to worry about being disappointed when reading your work--this jumped out at me:

"covering the playful hands of thought
with gloves that didn't fit

my mind " ...stunning

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2008-12-03 12:49 PM


steavenr..thanks guy!!
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5 posted 2008-12-03 01:14 PM


quote:
and my mind would wonder of your hair
with the sun playing copper on gold
and how your eyes catch colors on fire


I am in awe of your mind, dear D.!

hills dancing ... dipped in sunset colors and freedom.

Outstanding work!

Love,
Margherita

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6 posted 2008-12-03 01:18 PM


ms mar..thank you for the summer side of your smile
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7 posted 2008-12-03 03:43 PM


Yes please do
try me on for size

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2008-12-04 08:25 AM


ms inky..naughty looks so good on you, thanks babe
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9 posted 2008-12-04 04:01 PM


there was laughter in your voice
like you had a smile on, on purpose

I like this poem very much... especially the ending lines. *S* But the lines above? *S* I can't read them without smiling. *S*

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10 posted 2008-12-04 04:12 PM


Ms suthern..making you smile is my bestest reward..thanks lady
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11 posted 2008-12-13 01:49 AM


You know, when I first read this I wanted to express how much I loved it and that it is a keeper to treasure.  And I did not respond because words just seemed trite.

I love this.

That is my response.

A

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12 posted 2008-12-13 06:29 AM


ms ali-san..your treasure then it is...thanks babe
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