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vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

0 posted 2008-12-02 07:01 PM

To You

To you
My love
I am writing this to you
Telling to you
That I still love you
I know
You are away
And I am saying this all
To you
Time flies
Without you
To you
Giving my rest to you
Giving you the best
To you
I am writing this to you
Because I want to fix
This piece of a broken heart
To you
I want you back in my life
To you
I loved you
With all my heart

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

1 posted 2008-12-02 07:22 PM

very hearty and hearfelt write

Pestillence
Junior Member

since 2008-09-03

Posts 25
England

2 posted 2008-12-02 07:24 PM

I liked the concept and the words are obviously very personal and heartfelt. I just don't think I liked the constant 'to you' but I liked the heart on your sleeve nature of the poem, good job

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

3 posted 2008-12-02 08:21 PM

I liked the persistence of the "to you's" throughout this...it gave it a special quality

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

4 posted 2008-12-03 12:36 PM

Lovely Write!

ARCTIC WIND

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

5 posted 2008-12-03 02:40 PM

vandana - if this doesn't touch him... this writing says it as you feel...

BC

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2008-12-03 06:04 PM

Wonderful...James

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2008-12-03 06:09 PM

I think you will fix the broken heart, dear Vandana! This is pure heart in action.

Love,
Margherita

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

8 posted 2008-12-04 04:14 PM

I loved you
With all my heart

I understand this yearning to turn back time... you wrote it well! *S*

KandyGrl511
Member

since 2008-11-30

Posts 52
Michigan

9 posted 2008-12-04 10:09 PM

great poem! i really liked it!?!

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

10 posted 2008-12-04 10:42 PM

Yo Vandana,

There is good and loving emotion shown in this poem.

Love Bobby

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