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Beginner’s Ballet
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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In the space of breath, my life was altered. So much I'd believed was shown to be lies Leaving no choice but change my perception Of what I am, mistakes and successes. I'd only seen worthless through well-trained eyes When I glanced into mirror's reflection. There is siren's comfort in familiar Blame beckons once more like slippers well-worn As fears spring forth again, striking to bone. Immense conscious effort is required to Resist impulse to curl into forlorn And for sins that weren't mine, attempt atone. But then thoughts of you restore my courage And I gladly embrace this second chance. Thumbing my nose at a past not quite purged I rise, sashay shyly across the floor, And though my movements are not yet a dance I sway to music no longer a dirge. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your closing line literally gave me the tingles! Oh, yes indeedy! "I sway to music no longer a dirge." ~ Music to my eyes, dear friend! I'm swaying right along with you!  Loveya! Linda |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You go girl. There is always a song to dance to ... it's just the musicians that change the pace. Well done and nice to see the positive coming out. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Suthern, this is superb! It's great to see you 'sashay' across this blue screen. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"And though my movements are not yet a dance I sway to music no longer a dirge." Great when that happens because soon the dance! Enjoyed your words! Helen |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I love the theme you weave so carefully through this, culminating in a perfect last line...nicely done |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This poem shows so much freedom at the end. Sashay on! You do it grace - I really like this poem and wish you posted more often now. Alison |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"I rise, sashay shyly across the floor, And though my movements are not yet a dance I sway to music no longer a dirge" i hope things are getting back to ab-normal again for you, as no one has normal. i think of you often and wish you well. great write as always and i am just 1 click away on e mail smooches h |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
The poem is excellent in every way, for a start - art, content and originality! Introspection is always good, as long as it moves one forward, as this beautiful poem does. I love it, Ruth. - Owl |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
I agree with EA! ARCTIC WIND |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
suthern - enjoyed reading this, as it does say a lot... BC |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
And if anyone deserves to sway to a music not quite a dirge it is you. Wonderful poem. It's good to see you posting. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Very beautiful write! And when you feel the desire to dance, you are ready to leap into happiness again. That's how it works. Love, Margherita |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
A wonderfully uplifting piece of work, suthern gal. I am now left with an image of you sashaying...  |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Suthern, This is cool. It's great you're feeling good about yourself. Love Bobby |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yes! Well done, Laura, well done. I'm not sure which I love more, the sense of strength and hope in this, or the inviting way you've written it. Life's never fair, but with the spirit you show here, it's good. I'm glad I read this one. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
You you have what it takes , and I am still learning.Thank you. "late" |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
EA: Thank you so much, my tingling friend. *S* I appreciate the company... especially yours! *S* Mark: Well... you know some of us have to clean out our ears, right? LOL Thank you so much for those kind words, cowboy! *S* MS: And back at 'cha, my friend! *S* Thank you so much! Honeybunch: Thank you - I'm so glad you enjoyed! *S* vandana: Thank you, dear lady! *S* steavenr: I appreciate your comments very much... thank you! *S* Alison: Thank you so much - I wish so, too! *S* 1slick_lady: They're getting better. *S* I've a ways to go still... but LOTS better. *S* Thank you... and don't be too surprised if I make that click one day soon. *S* Owl: And I love your response! *S* Thank you so much for that generous praise! *S* AW: I'm so glad you liked... thank you! *S* Thank you, Bill... it's a long journey, but that first step's behind me. *S* Kethry: It's good to BE posting... and to have you here. *S* Thank you so much, dear friend. *S* Margherita: Thank you! *S* I'm glad you found beauty in it! *S* Bal: ROFL...I'm so sorry... I didn't mean to do that to you! Quick! Shut your eyes and see if that helps! LOL Thank you so much, Dear One! *S* Bobby: It IS great! *S* Thank you!!! Ratleader: I'm glad you did, too. *S* And yes... life is pretty good... in spite of everything. *S* Thank you very much! Ah, late... my friend, you have all you need... we see it clearly! *S* Thank you! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Suthern that is one great poem much enjoyed. Lindsay |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I think I put my own spin on this, but that is what makes for good poetry. I see a woman doing something that is new to her once again in this  and I say, "You Go Girl!" |
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