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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2008-12-02 11:44 AM


Yes

a word of chance
by definition
in risk of more
not less in danger
do you find that
comfort fits too well
how likely it is
that it will occur
a hope of possible
so unpredictable
gambling peril
finding fortune


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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2008-12-02 02:54 PM


"gambling peril
finding fortune"
Very nice, Helen.

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
2 posted 2008-12-02 04:09 PM


You nailed the "yes" on the head and I loved your 2 closing lines.
Huan Yi
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Waukegan
3 posted 2008-12-02 08:48 PM


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“Relationships
become more difficult
as one grows older

The thought
of going through that
all over again
is unsupportable

so I don’t bother”

Peter O’Toole


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Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
4 posted 2008-12-03 12:37 PM


I say YES! to this write dearest Helen!


ARCTIC WIND

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5 posted 2008-12-04 03:41 PM


a hope of possible
so unpredictable
gambling peril
finding fortune

And all contained in 3 small letters, forming my favorite word. *S*

I like this very much! *S*

steavenr
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6 posted 2008-12-04 03:53 PM


your last lines are a definite hit...nice write
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