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rhia_5779
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0 posted 2008-12-01 09:44 AM



Dark sky is painted with the colors of turned off stars
Clouds move around in the sky- constantly changing
Hiding flickers of light- seeming smaller than a fingerprint

Breeze wanders aimlessly reaching out to treetops
Picking up a leaf for flight or dropping it back down
Jam-packed with directions- not knowing where to go

Silver crescent shines alone in a darkened sky
Self conscious of her flaws- part of her hides away
Only aware of how striking the other lights are

Soft gentle air- whispers of friendship and loyalty
Betray the tough exterior threatening to crack
From far away no one can see anything wrong- no tears

Moody and pmsing the moon is seen different each night
Switching from confident and full to a sliver of her former self
Rotating visions so no one can sense a pattern and figure her out

More lights shine tonight portraying the smiles- meaningful gifts
For a second everything crashes to a standstill- staying true to self
Dust settles to the ground- grey sketched clouds breathe for a moment

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Midnitesun
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1 posted 2008-12-01 11:28 AM


You have some nice imagery here.
What was this typo meant to be?
"Moody and ??pmsing the moon is seen different each night"

steavenr
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2 posted 2008-12-01 04:51 PM


"Dust settles to the ground- grey sketched clouds breathe for a moment"

...love this line, but, I too, am wondering about the meaning of 'pmsing'

rhia_5779
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3 posted 2008-12-01 10:17 PM


I actually meant PMSing , you  know how like girls sometimes do that. I don't know maybe its not tasteful but since the moon was a metaphor for how I felt at the time I thought it fit. Glad you liked it!
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