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ethome
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0 posted 2008-11-30 02:39 AM


Ballad

She spoke with style so sincere
but she masked a hidden grief.
She talked too fast, forced her laugh,
too much smoke with her heat.
Like desire that's gone mad
her soul was never still
but my blind eyes she unclad
and touched my heart with thrills

I knew she owed her life's cares
to a man that was married
but he kept her dreams so impaired
that her smile had grown weary
she longed to speak with a voice
where she could gather true respect
but she never got to make the choice
and she suffered from neglect.

One night on my old house boat she said;
"I need to love someone
I need to change my scene.
I need to love someone
who'll give their heart to me.
I need to love someone
need to love'em day and night,
I need to love someone
cause my heart's not working right."

So I'd try to stroke her sore heart chords
and ease the pain she'd reaped
but she'd turn off as I was getting close
and stare away from me.
I could hear her heart when we'd begin
my slow hands would move her soul
I'd speak soft cares to give her room
but some trouble left her cold.

Then we met one night on the old house boat
her face was blank unsure.
So we sat on the deck, she let it out
like rain her heart thoughts poured
the mind she spilled gave me a chill
I could sense her childlike hopes.
Said she wished her dreams were real
but she looked so down and out.

So I asked how her dreams might happen
because I knew she'd come so clean.
She replied she'd left the empty mess
and hoped she'd stay with me.
said she was outcast lonely
her heart had honest grief
if she became my one and only
she'd give me everything I need

(pause)
Well, she looked so pure and simple
that I took her in my arms
and in my ear she whispered gentle
with a voice so damned disarmed.

"I need to love someone
I need to change my scene.
I need to love someone
who'll give their heart to me.
I need to love someone
need to love 'em day and night,
I need to love someone
cause my heart's not working right."

That was the day she came to stay!
© Eric True


IF YOU HAVE TO JUDGE SOMEONE DO IT ON THE SIDE OF MERCY AND LET TIME SEASON THE RESULTS.

© Copyright 2008 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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1 posted 2008-11-30 02:48 AM


Dear Eric... I did so enjoy this.. it actually seems like a song to me... I am so pleased it had a happy ending...   love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

ethome
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2 posted 2008-11-30 03:03 AM


Thanks RDB Yes, it a long folk style ballad.....Meant for the acoustic guitar sort of thing.

Eric

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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3 posted 2008-11-30 03:08 AM


well it is just perfect for that!!

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Margherita
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4 posted 2008-11-30 09:31 AM


Dear Eric, I enjoyed your Ballad greatly and I am sure if I could hear you sing it accompanied with the guitar, it would be wonderful.

It's nice to see you back. I love your very poignant poem.

Love,
Margherita

Earth Angel
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5 posted 2008-11-30 02:35 PM


My word, Eric, you are quite the lyricist!!!
What a touching ballad! It certainly engaged my emotions!

Oh, and I liked the happy ending! ~ or should I say, "beginning"!


Linda

ethome
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6 posted 2008-11-30 02:42 PM


Thanks again RDB much appreciated as always.
ethome
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7 posted 2008-11-30 02:44 PM


Many thanks Margherita for the read and the wonderful comments.....Glad to be here.

Eric

Magnus
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8 posted 2008-11-30 04:25 PM


Nice write,  I can hear the boards of the
dock creaking as they walked toward the
houseboat.

Oklahoma Rose
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9 posted 2008-11-30 07:12 PM


Wow! This is fantastic. You are a wonderful writer.
vandana
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10 posted 2008-11-30 07:23 PM


nice
ethome
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11 posted 2008-12-04 05:06 PM


Thank you Angel for the read and the lovely response.

Eric

ethome
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12 posted 2008-12-09 06:36 PM


Hey Barry good to hear from you.
Thanks for the creaking, maybe it sounds like my bones these days.....LOL!

Eric

ethome
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13 posted 2008-12-27 12:15 PM


Thank you Rose and Vandana I sure appreciate the visit and the kind words.

Eric

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