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brian sites
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since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475
usa

0 posted 2008-11-25 02:44 AM



I feel a curl of hands
          coming on

                  a walk
      on a block
of feetwood
                a death of
           distraction
a
no   longer
          unfocusedment
     a forced----meat
of nonloafment

                  oh
bring it on!
            
                    I tire of
Unemployment
       Raise my mind to the
highest Numbing

             it is worth
                    the Dollar
      to feed
my 39th
        dumbing

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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
1 posted 2008-11-25 06:22 AM


  Raise my mind to the
highest Numbing


awww, I hope things get better...enjoyed your play on words

M

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
2 posted 2008-11-25 12:51 PM


I enjoyed your clever poem.  I rrrrrrrrrreally hope that you get a job soon.

- Owl

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

3 posted 2008-11-26 02:15 AM


It's very Irish, how you stack your words of stone. But I hear the voice of the Ameriman screaming, the mortar that holds it all together--damn baby.

You are so........Joycean.

and Bri-man too.


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