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shortsleeves
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0 posted 2008-11-24 11:38 AM


Dancing In A Dream
I Become A Madman
Dressed In A Divine
Question

Answers Slip Into Majestic
Enzymes Of Consciousness
That Slowly Drip
With Your Essence

Innately I Touch Our
Oneness
As Twinkling Stars
Burst With Energy

Captured In An Exotic
Transparency
My Dream Becomes
Reality

www.shortsleeves.net http://halmanogue.blogspot.com/


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OwlSA
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1 posted 2008-11-24 12:05 PM


Simultaneously sensual and spiritual; and literal and metaphorical - and a pleasure to read, Hal.  

- Owl

shortsleeves
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2 posted 2008-11-24 12:21 PM


Thank you for your awareness and our connection Owl.
Hal

Margherita
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3 posted 2008-11-24 06:34 PM


quote:
Dancing In A Dream
I Become A Madman
Dressed In A Divine
Question



You convey such intense emotion with this dance, dear Hal! I think we were created to dance to the harmonious tunes of life and love and you express a very captivating universal graciousness here.

It is a keeper!

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

shortsleeves
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4 posted 2008-11-24 07:01 PM


Thank you Margherita. I appreciate your dance of love.
Love,
Hal

Bill Charles
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5 posted 2008-11-24 08:23 PM


shortsleeves - love the romance in this write, well done....

BC

shortsleeves
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6 posted 2008-11-25 03:14 PM


Thanks for your thoughts Bill.
Hal

Earth Angel
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7 posted 2008-11-30 01:26 PM


Hal, I like the way you "see" ~ and the way that you dance with your pen!

Love 'n a hug,
Linda

shortsleeves
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8 posted 2008-11-30 01:32 PM


Thanks Linda, I enjoy your rhythm as well.
Love,
Hal

steavenr
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9 posted 2008-12-01 12:38 PM


"Dressed In A Divine
Question"

nice touch...goes well with your 'Fragrance Lingers"...

AcousticPen
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since 2008-12-01
Posts 13
Florida USA
10 posted 2008-12-01 03:31 AM


Dressed in a devine question. Your words truely provoke me to think in ways that most poets do, thank you for the inquisitive peice.

-Scott Vukelic

shortsleeves
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11 posted 2008-12-01 09:10 AM


Thanks for your thoughts Steavenr.

Acoustic Pen, I appreciate your comments and friendship.
Hal

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25
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12 posted 2008-12-01 09:06 PM


Yo Shortsleeves,

The thought of this poem is good.

I don't understand all the caps.

Bobby

rhia_5779
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13 posted 2008-12-01 10:20 PM


I thought the caps were a bit much but thats me since they aren't my think. This was really good though- very carefully crafted but it turned out really well. The wording is really well done and its just beautifully written! Strong write!
Rhia

shortsleeves
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14 posted 2008-12-02 07:20 AM


Thanks Bobby. I appreciate your thoughts.

Thanks for your comments Rhia.
Hal

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