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Jaime Fradera
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Where no tyranny is tolerable

0 posted 2008-11-24 08:40 AM



:-------)

Friendship is for Life, if not Forever.

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Pantheress
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1 posted 2008-11-24 08:50 AM


Great poem, I love it, When can I expect more?SMILES.. It was such easy reading and kind on the brain and eyes,chuckles..
The Esoteric Being
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2 posted 2008-11-24 09:40 AM


Pinnoci-nose

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Jaime Fradera
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Where no tyranny is tolerable
3 posted 2008-11-24 03:57 PM


Yes, pantheress. You have a tremendous insight about how this poem was created.  Let me tell you?  I worked on it for so many hours and hours.  I went through ream after ream of liquid paper.  I wore out all my electronic pixels.  Al dulled all my pickles.  I went through cartridges and cargreges of ink.  I went through can after can of whiteout to patch over mistakes.  I laboured endlessly over the propper arrangement of santa clauses, conjunctions, verbs, adverbs ... and wondered if all this would look okay in Australian!
And just to think my great ompus magnum, my immortal verse, actually got out to Australia before I even got out of the shower!
But maybe I've gotten too verbose... maybe I'll do a shorter one next time and you'll get it first!!!
From up over down under
Jaime

Friendship is for Life, if not Forever.

Pantheress
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4 posted 2008-11-25 12:39 PM


Well, all I can say Jamie is I'm really impressed, thank you for all the hard work and effort, the tedious hours of getting it just right for your wider audience and not forgetting your enormous expensive of perfecting this fine piece of... Ummmm.. Awww.. pure genius,chuckles.. Us Aussie's really appreciate your fantastic talent, take care of you,smiles..
jwesley
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5 posted 2008-11-25 03:20 PM


I loved the flow of it...though I must admit it was a little above me, and I'll never understand how one can rhyme so beautifully---that to is beyond me.

j.

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6 posted 2008-11-26 09:39 AM


Now this is a poem that breeds a lot of thought.

Well presented, Jaime.

xoxoxo
Alison

Jaime Fradera
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Where no tyranny is tolerable
7 posted 2008-11-26 08:26 PM


Ali.
Seeing your name up here made me smile bigger and bigger and bigger ... and ... and ...
What will my dreams conceive tonight?
Love
Jaime

Friendship is for Life, if not Forever.

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