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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2008-11-23 09:20 AM



Unstructured

Caught between those dissolving  lines
where times have changed
and unseen words map the day

where chance or fate can corner the mind
and from a broken promise
can walk away...

from shattered dreams
only fairy-tale real,
from aches and pains
that penetrate feel

from kisses of faith
and fleeting bliss,
answers unknown
from a world in the "miss"

Caught between those dissolving lines,
a twisted path, unstructured, confines.


M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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Magnus
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1 posted 2008-11-23 11:46 AM


Great write,  excellent lines, thanx M.
nakdthoughts
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2 posted 2008-11-23 02:37 PM


thank you Barry

Great to see you on here


M

Margherita
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Eternity
3 posted 2008-11-23 03:39 PM


quote:
from shattered dreams
only fairy-tale real,
from aches and pains
that penetrate feel

from kisses of faith
and fleeting bliss,
answers unknown
from a world in the "miss"



Dear Maureen, this is an exceptional write! And I do so know what you convey here.

Love,
Margherita

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
4 posted 2008-11-23 04:34 PM


Thank you, Margherita dear.  I am just trying to keep in touch with my poetic side since I am just "plain tired" right now

This isn't my best time of the year besides  catching those germs from those 5 year olds.

and thanks
M

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
5 posted 2008-11-23 04:48 PM


Maureen - each of your writes say so much, and they are done exceptionally well...

BC

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
6 posted 2008-11-23 05:16 PM


As always, Bill, I thank you (for being you

M

Robert E. Jordan
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7 posted 2008-11-23 05:18 PM


Yo dear M,

The perception that times are changing has been around for ages.  In actuality, things change very slowly.  Not so a person would notice them changing.

Love Bobby

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
8 posted 2008-11-23 05:42 PM


Believe me Bobby, I have noticed the change~~


M

Marchmadness
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9 posted 2008-11-25 09:17 PM


I notice the change too, Maureen, and enjoyed your words.By the way, When I worked at school I always had a cold at this time of year.
                                Ida

steavenr
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10 posted 2008-11-26 02:57 PM


nicely written...well crafted not only in form but content as well...enjoyed
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