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secondhanddreampoet
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0 posted 2008-11-22 11:53 PM


          Traceless

our lives are ultimately
   traceless…

as the path of every cloud
in a boundless sky,
and each flake of snow
among a thousand brethren,
or all the fluid moments
that drop into eternity…

our finest dreams vanishing
like smoke and shadows
in the moonlit wind.

          --- b. e. adams (11/23/08)

[This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (11-23-2008 12:06 AM).]

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amusemi
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1 posted 2008-11-22 11:58 PM


I like this...nice write.
Midnitesun
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Gaia
2 posted 2008-11-24 07:42 PM


I'm hearing "Dust in the wind" playing in the background.
Bill Charles
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3 posted 2008-11-24 08:27 PM


secondhanddreampoet -

our finest dreams vanishing
like smoke and shadows
in the moonlit wind.

Yes, I find this to be true, many fine thoughts here...

BC

OwlSA
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4 posted 2008-11-25 12:46 PM


Exquisitely beautiful, but so sad.  I wish you didn't feel that way.

- Owl

steavenr
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5 posted 2008-11-25 02:00 PM


lovely write...beautiful pics in your careful words...so well done...
Margherita
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Eternity
6 posted 2008-11-25 06:07 PM


quote:
or all the fluid moments
that drop into eternity…



Melancholic yet so captivating!

If those "moments do drop into eternity ..." they are not undone.

Love,
Margherita

Marchmadness
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7 posted 2008-11-25 09:31 PM


It's hard to imagine that thoughts and words such as these could ever just vanish.
I guess that's what gives me hope.
                                  Ida

2islander2
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8 posted 2008-11-26 04:54 PM


Hi Bruce, the truth shines in the deep of your exalting poem.

thanks

yann

GG
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9 posted 2008-11-27 07:56 AM


This made me sigh... gently, contently.
Beautiful! Great writing.

~alyssa

Hupomeno.

divine chaos
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dancing 'neath the moon
10 posted 2008-11-27 09:44 AM


I've missed reading you .. I'll have to make time to come around more often *smiles* lovely write

~Sheli~

It's psychosomatic.  You need a lobotomy.  I'll get a saw
~Calvin & Hobbes

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11 posted 2008-12-01 02:16 AM


Bruce,

Lovely like a whisper as time passes and leaves behind beauty.

Alison

lucky
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12 posted 2008-12-02 12:57 PM


unless, your born again..!

dale

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