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amusemi
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1262
A State of Disarray

0 posted 2008-11-17 02:38 AM

In the white room
On the white bed
Aching to climb
Anywhere out of my skin
While words collided together
That never belonged...
Yet making sense
In a belief
Of what could be.

Always fighting to control
That taunting fear
I would do something else
I couldn't repair
...but usually did.

Then, in he came
He said mine was
"A powerful mind"
And gave me a chalice
My first dose
Of sanity in Blue.

I'd been a 78
Living in a world
Of perfect 33's
But finally I could become
A ventriloquist's doll
Who can choose
To keep her mouth shut
And not have to
Play those records at all.

[This message has been edited by amusemi (11-17-2008 06:32 PM).]

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2008-11-17 04:53 AM

quote:
Then, in he came
He said mine was
"A powerful mind"
And gave me a chalice
My first dose
Of sanity in Blue.

Your mind game stirs the reader's mind too in a captivating way.

Love,
Margherita

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2008-11-17 06:54 AM

"I'd been a 78
Living in a world
Of perfect 33's
But finally I could become
A ventriloquist's doll
Who can choose
To keep her mouth shut
And not have to
Play those records at all."

that's exactly how I feel in today's world~~

M

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

3 posted 2008-11-17 06:09 PM

amusemi - you surely described it well...

BC

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

4 posted 2008-11-17 06:32 PM

"I'd been a 78
Living in a world
Of perfect 33's"

boy...could I relate to this...the rest of the last stanza is just as superb...well crafted...excellent

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

5 posted 2008-11-22 10:26 PM

amusemi,

I kept coming back to this poem and - now - take the time to thank you for writing it.

I like it a lot.

Alison

Callista
Member

since 2008-10-05

Posts 63
USA

6 posted 2008-11-22 11:34 PM

A very intriguing poem. I know that feeling.."aching to climb anywhere out of my skin." A very interesting paradox presented also: "Can a ventriloquist's doll choose to keep her mouth shut?"

amusemi
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1262
A State of Disarray

7 posted 2008-11-22 11:46 PM

Thankyou everyone for your kind replies.

And yes Callista, she can, when the mind is tamed and no longer has a mouthpiece... It's a personal metaphor thing...that's all.

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