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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song

0 posted 2008-11-15 11:34 AM



Billiard Bliss

Between swirling chords lofted in cigarette smoke
Songs of laughter filling in notes of random pause
Glances embraced with each lyric meant to evoke
As sways of interest dance in rendering applause

Corner fields of felt offer the battleground for cues
Where solids and stripes chalk up chances of gain
Singles become partners between pocketed views
Banking shots against barriers on friendships reign

Glimpses of tease squint through tequilla and lime
Taunting the visions between desires and dreams
Eyes of penetration reaching deep within this time
Through smiles of elegance in the purest of means

Attraction sealed within the maze of passion dance
Concentration lost in all values of game set in play
Time reclining against the arms of destined chance
Knowing this kiss will have to wait for another day


Mark Christopher -



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ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2008-11-15 01:10 PM


Well done.
Being the queen of stripes... I certainly appreciated the green felt corners, and glimpse into a smile I had almost forgotten... those left handed banks always create a little chaos of their own accord!

Earth Angel
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2 posted 2008-11-15 01:25 PM


As the old adage goes: "Anticipation is half the fun!"

You did a masterful job of creating an atmosphere!


Linda

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3 posted 2008-11-15 02:25 PM


You make poetry look so darn easy!  This was incredible Mark, good to read you again.
Bill Charles
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4 posted 2008-11-15 02:31 PM


Mark - whatever you write you do it very well. Enjoying reading this...

BC

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5 posted 2008-11-15 02:40 PM


quote:
Attraction sealed within the maze of passion dance
Concentration lost in all values of game set in play
Time reclining against the arms of destined chance
Knowing this kiss will have to wait for another day



Dear Mark, I love your refined choice of expressions and the neat presentation ... it is pure pleasure to read you and to enter your vivid scenery.

Love,
Margherita

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6 posted 2008-11-15 03:29 PM


Great work Mark!I enjoyed that piece; I became a cue ball of thought.
Hal

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7 posted 2008-11-15 03:43 PM


Yes I agree on that one, the atmosphere in this poem was created well by your mind and your creative thoughts. All the poet in you, releases in that wonderful pen of yours!!


ARCTIC WIND

Paula Finn
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8 posted 2008-11-16 11:13 AM


As always you paint the picture so very well
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
9 posted 2008-11-16 01:59 PM


Kathleen - I am sure you your crown well.  Thank you.

Linda - Thank you and you are so right. Anticipation is a wonderful thing.

Mysteria - Thank you for your always kind words.

Bill- I am glad you enjoyed it and I thank you.

Margherita - It is pure pleasure to have your visits and you and I am glad you entered the scenery.

Hal - Thank you much

Artic - Always kind words from you and I appreciate that.  Thank you.

Paula - Thank you and nice to see your name in here.


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10 posted 2008-11-16 08:11 PM


I liked your poem and really enjoyed reading what you wrote.. Thank you for sharing this with me,smiles..
nakdthoughts
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11 posted 2008-11-17 06:57 AM


"Singles become partners between pocketed views
Banking shots against barriers on friendships reign"

excellent as always~~ I haven't been in a pool hall in ages but remember it well


M

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12 posted 2008-11-17 10:22 AM


Very well done!
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
13 posted 2008-11-17 03:36 PM


Pantheress - Thank you and I am glad you enjoyed

nakdthoughts - I should stay out of them but I am drawn to the game.  Thank you much.

Oklahoma Rose - Thank you.  I appreciate your visit.

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14 posted 2008-11-18 07:46 PM


Ah..here it is.

And I shall restrain myself from the obvious punchline regarding balls and racks so I can thank you properly for allowing me to remember a place in time that was once a safe haven to me.



(I still love the sound of the release, though. *chuckle* Does a game still cost fifty cents?)

I haven't been played a game in a lonnnnng time.

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15 posted 2008-11-18 11:00 PM


"Time reclining against the arms of destined chance"

beautifully creative words in a cleverly pennned write...enjoyed

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16 posted 2008-11-19 12:25 PM


Mark,

I could smell the smoke, taste the tequila and heard the balls being broken.  Thank you.

Alison

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17 posted 2008-11-19 04:27 PM


As a player, I'm a really, really good... cheerleader. *G* But Alison is right... your words engage all the senses... and there's no place I'd rather be. *S*
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18 posted 2008-11-19 11:30 PM


The way you use meter is so unique! I'd swear you're using a Greek scansion, but I can't place it, and the cadence flows so naturally that I've a feeling it comes from inside the poet rather than an outside pattern. So I'll just call it Classical Mark, and spend some time trying to understand why it's so effective.

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Dark Stranger
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19 posted 2008-11-20 10:44 AM


ok mark...this is video pool on the PC with a bud light and a pack of camels right?

enjoyed it amigo!

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
20 posted 2008-11-20 03:30 PM


Karen - The release is always a treat in the game, but 50 cents?  Not around here, but I have learned that as long as I win the table then the challenger has to drop the $1.25.  Thanks for the smiles.

steavenr-Thank you for finding it clever.

Alison-If you could taste the tequilla then I think I just bought you a shot.  Thanks much.

Ruth - If your senses were engaged then I am happy.  Thank you much.

Ratleader - I am not sure of what meter it is as I just type with my eyes closed until the pop open.  I thank you for your comments and happy you found it effective.

Dark - Bud light???????  Is that a real beer??  Thank you my friend of SO CA


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